You Don't Know/repost from open 10/ reworked/Is this the one you asked for Karen?

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2003-07-01 03:44 AM

You don’t know

You don't know how I look upon your brow
how I search for the pool of green in your eyes
even the gum leaves fall into them from trees above
they too want to dive into the very depths of you
I know, for I captured it.

There you lay and I notice the kiss
of sun upon your lips as they smile at me
the breeze tangled comfortably through your hair
the way your hand and the white of your nails lightly
rests upon that aged picnic table
how I wished I was it.

I remember the burnt leaves of autumn
how they swirled and danced the tango around your ankles
you don't know how the grass cried as you flicked it
into the past,
I know, for I captured it.

You don't know how the rain of tears fall at my feet
the way each drop bounces back up with a memory
spent with you:

You don't know how much I love you.

Angel of Darkness
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fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (07-01-2003 04:09 AM).]

Cruina
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1 posted 2003-07-01 03:51 AM

I liked the way there was a format... it was very cohesive, tied together well.

"you don't know how the grass cried as you flicked it
into the past,
I know, for I captured it."

Those were my favorite lines. "Flicked" was an interesting choice of words...
Well done...

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-07-01 04:01 AM

wow! thanks for the repost!

Nan

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3 posted 2003-07-01 07:50 AM

Very nice, Maree - A beautifully romantic piece...

wranx
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4 posted 2003-07-01 08:55 AM

Damn, but this is nice.

Glad you reposted it.
Ed

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5 posted 2003-07-01 09:22 AM

If it's not the one she asked for, then may I do the honors?

Thanks for bringing back this memory...it brought back some of mine to match.

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coyote
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6 posted 2003-07-01 09:37 AM

The camera lens merely captures the moment. The human mind however, has a lens of interpretation, through which memory is perceived, and feeling is fulfilled.

Simply lovely Maree, as always a beautiful write.

Thanks,
Billy

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Sunshine

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7 posted 2003-07-01 09:39 AM

Maree, even if it's NOT the one Karen wanted, I know I enjoyed it...thank you so much for bringing it back to us on this sultry summer day....

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2003-07-01 10:59 AM

I remember this one too, and I'll take BOTH if I can have 'em...although this isn't the one I was thinking of, it is just as beautiful.

you are so lovely in love, luscious!

thank you!

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2003-07-01 11:16 AM

and I still haven't found it, but I'm loving the search--

ooooooooohhhhhhhhh I'd almost forgotten this gem:
/pip/Forum44/HTML/002625.html

suthern

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10 posted 2003-07-01 12:07 PM

I'm glad you posted this... for whether it's the "right" one or not, it's just right. *S*

Aenimal
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11 posted 2003-07-01 01:06 PM

See Lady Maree,
I told you there were tonnes of gems in your archives silly.

Wind

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12 posted 2003-07-01 01:23 PM

I was just looking in there, in fact. Wow, there are a lot of memories, a lot of them.

anyway, I read your poem for the first time, and it was really good. Glad you reposted.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
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Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-07-01 05:18 PM

Hi poet friends, thank you very much for your lovely replies. This one goes back almost 3 years ...goodness... sigh.

Anyway Karen hmmmmm like I said ,there are several which mention green eyes so the search is going to be somewhat er fun lol.

Glad you're enjoying the search. I'll keep searching and I'll e it to you yes?

hugs gorgeous one

Thank you all

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Jamie
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14 posted 2003-07-15 06:40 PM

I do

J

hugs

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Dark Angel
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15 posted 2003-07-16 03:18 AM

I know you do m'friend, I know.

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

BluesSerenade
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16 posted 2003-07-16 01:45 PM

I remember the burnt leaves of autumn
how they swirled and danced the tango around your ankles
you don't know how the grass cried as you flicked it
into the past,
I know, for I captured it.

You captured the heart of a poet like a love song that blows through an open door.

Beautiful poem Maree~

JaiOfHeaven
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17 posted 2003-07-16 07:58 PM

that was nice...the way the tears bounced back up with memories....crazy writing.

Jai

garysgirl

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18 posted 2003-07-16 08:12 PM

You don't know how the rain of tears fall at my feet
the way each drop bounces back up with a memory
spent with you:

You don't know how much I love you.

Maree, this is just beautiful...so raomantic. I read the one Karen put the link too, and that is HOT, Lady. A very good poem, just as this one is. I'm going to be looking for your to post more of these romantic gems.

Hugs

Ethel

vandana

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19 posted 2003-07-17 09:32 AM

enjoyed

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