What I Did With My Saturday Night (For You)

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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2003-07-01 02:11 AM

What I did?
sat here trying to write the words
that choke my heart
while missing you
thinking you here
willing you out of that cage
you lock yourself in for someone else's sake.
I breathed
I loved
I missed your touch
and hated you at the same time
for making tears come
when I can't make them come myself.
I didn't fling myself on the mercy of men
and hope to be carried away in strong arms
and
I
am
Tired
of trying to make you believe
that my poetry
is sometimes just my inner rages
wreaking havoc on my will.
So forgive me
if this
isn't the best me you've ever known
or if this poem isn't one of my masterpieces
but I'm waiting for you to work it out
so you don't have to wonder
what I did with my Saturday night.

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2003-07-01 02:40 AM

So forgive me
if this
isn't the best me you've ever known...

oh my!!! this is truly a wonderful piece of poetry! Brava Bella! Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

2 posted 2003-07-01 04:54 PM

It just goes to show that, sometimes, the words do not reflect reality.

Thank you.

Peace is the only battle worth waging.
--- Albert Camus

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2003-07-01 05:52 PM

Not your best?  Perhaps...but this
bittersweet write is very powerful in
emotions and the message.  I would
say it is one of your best.

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

4 posted 2003-07-01 11:04 PM

I would say that you did an excellent job of telling him what you did.

And I hope he listens and then ... understands ... and then ... does something to fix it.

Powerful write here dear Lady.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-07-01 11:13 PM

So forgive me
if this
isn't the best me you've ever known
or if this poem isn't one of my masterpieces

Jenn, I believe this is one of your best because it comes straight from your heart.

Lady, I really hope that the person this is intended for sees this and does something to improve the situation. You are reaching out very effectively.

Thanks for letting us see a piece of your heart.

Hugs to you

Ethel

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

6 posted 2003-07-01 11:45 PM

of trying to make you believe
that my poetry
is sometimes just my inner rages
wreaking havoc on my will.
So forgive me
if this
isn't the best me you've ever known
or if this poem isn't one of my masterpieces
but I'm waiting for you to work it out
so you don't have to wonder
what I did with my Saturday night.

Absolutelty Exquisite Temptress....wonderful poetry, and yes this was my favorite part!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2003-07-14 01:09 AM

powerful. . . as all your work is. . .

great work. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (07-15-2003 09:55 AM).]

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