Open Poetry #27 |
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Watching You Sleep |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys ![]() |
A smile behind a veil I know you will still be here. I won't say a single word But when you wake I'll know what to say, I'll present you with the option of a kiss or a rose or maybe I'll look into your eyes and give you both If I can watch you. Radiance exudes from you I am not whole without you There are just three words That can make all of these obsolete Can I tell you? While you are sleeping |
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Kaoru![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"I'll present you with the option of a kiss or a rose or maybe I'll look into your eyes and give you both If I can watch you." Really enjoyed this ![]() |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
wow..i think this expressed so much emotion i just adore it. great write |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
If you can't say three, say one.... "Yes." She will know. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Beautiful words. When you watch someone sleep.The lines of stress or anger or of life's emotions disappear into complete peace.The lines fade into a peaceful glow. Keep those wonderous words of poetry a comin' and I'll keep reading. Bonnie j aka Bon-Bon |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thank you all for you'r wonderful words of encourgement. i usually post in dark, but i have found my muse... |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And nice having a muse you don't have to choke things out of, eh?....so it doesn't come out as Dark.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful write |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am not whole without you Beautiful write, eor... and if she knows this... she hears even what you don't say. *S* |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
I really liked this. Thanks for sharing with us her in Open. quatro |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
eor, your muse has helped you a great deal. This piece is delicate and passionate as well. Excellent words in this piece. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thank all of you, my insperation continues...i'll be posting soon... |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Beautiful poem! Glad you found your muse... Mine is starting to return. I have always found it easier to write Dark poetry (especially during my depressing college years) but I'm trying to lighten up, so to speak. Enjoy your work! ![]() Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks, i hope your muse returns, but dark is good as well, look forward to see some of your 'lighter' stuff:-) "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Thanks, Eor. At least while I'm waiting for my muse to catch up with me, I'll have your poems to keep me going! ![]() Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
Thank you for posting this! It helped my muse write today's poem. Overall, 'twas an absolutely eloquent and beautiful write. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
eor....charming and tenderly written....much enjoyed! |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
eor, this is so beautiful. Thank you for sharing it with us. You know, I have trouble understanding the Dark Poetry sometimes, but I had no trouble whatsoever understanding this poem. It is absolutely beautiful. ![]() Hugs ![]() Ethel |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"There are just three words That can make all of these obsolete Can I tell you? While you are sleeping" One of life's best moments. Enjoyed Matt... ![]() |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thank you, all of you, you bring a smile to my face, and that means more than you know...:-) "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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