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Open Poetry #27

Freedom

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-06-28 10:45 PM

Your heartbeat
asphyxiates me.
Suggesting, once again,
that my end is nearing.

It takes ages to reach you..
Flightless bird, am I?
My aura sheds from me.

traitor..

I am forbidden to
look towards the surface, of
where it began..

Your heartbeat transcends
all time and expression..
All that I can comprehend.
Growing ever merciless to your words..

slave..

I loathe the glass that
pertrudes from you.
My soul is weeping for
encompassed by my new skin,
is a word worth screaming..

freedom..

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-06-28 10:48 PM

terrificly expressed,,,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ

eminor_angel
Member

since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

2 posted 2003-06-28 10:50 PM

I've never seen anyone actually use the word "asphyxiates" in a poem before. I like your use of italics, it's a nice touch.

beachbabe
New Member

since 2003-06-28

Posts 8
Klamath Falls, Oregon

3 posted 2003-06-28 10:52 PM

Wow!! That has to be one of the most touching poems I have read in a VERY long time. You have pure talent. It brought tears to my eyes. Bravo.

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