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Foil Wrapped Salvation (Duet with Littlewing)
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Foil Wrapped Salvation (Duet with Littlewing) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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I know it's not you but the image I hate a promise broken created by your creations distorted with time As am I, twisted bone and ligaments strewn over a graveyard of lies I am your child or so they say sitting wide eyed by the tree waiting for foil wrapped salvation |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
As am I, twisted bone and ligaments strewn over a graveyard of lies Kewl imagery both of you, enjoyed. you make a great team  Maree |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
that's depressing stuff, but good! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
foil wrapped salvation, huh? hmmmm... do I have stories to tell...  But yes, doncha just love the pre-packaged salvation (remember that guy who used to sell--er, offer in exchange for a donation of faith those paper prayer mats? Whatever happened to him?) Musta got raptured.  All the way to Huntsville I hope.  Love this. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Wow I see this went over well..jesus h.. thanks much ladies. In medieval times the church used to offer a certificate(for a price of course) that would ensure your entrance into heaven..gotta love that |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
This is just awesome for words |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
gutsy, u 2,and i relate, but whats the foil about, duh, i dont get it. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write you two!!! May we expect more? Please? ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks guys . . . Nancy - Michele - K - Maree - dixie and Brad - truly . . . hehehe well the foil Michele picture Christmas time - sitting under the tree - equate that image of Santa with the image of what we have been taught about God by society - blind faith sort of you know? Hence, foil wrapped salvation . . . Or maybe it can be an easter egg too - you know like the Easter Bunny who is also a huge farce . . . this wasnt intended towards God - no but societys' God . . . Thanks everyone xxoo Raph - add to that? [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-14-2003 11:29 AM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ahhhhhhh..."foil wrapped salvation"...the brass ring of blessings...nice yall...smooch...h |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
Two of my favorite poets I especially love this part I am your child or so they say sitting wide eyed by the tree waiting for foil wrapped salvation Raph - as a fellow orphan - I share your viewpoint Littlewing - pass the milk and cookies I dont think he's coming You make a great team I always enjoy both of your writings The two of you amaze me [This message has been edited by dreambuilder (06-14-2003 02:45 AM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
you two r bloody great. I am your child or so they say sitting wide eyed by the tree waiting for foil wrapped salvation i'm in awe. a keeper this is, which says so so much. muchos love to you both love gem xxx |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
this duets interest me alot i could see two different styles brought together to form a wonderful poem makes you think what combo styles would produce what kind of poems like since i do'nt know how this duet stuff works or anyone to duet with ill never be able to be part of such a great interest i uptake my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Deep - and really well done. I think you hit the nail on the head with your point about salvation. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks slick - I am honored you are here to read this - truly smooches back - very cool Dream - I already ate the milk and cookies I couldnt help myself lol (actually they were becoming stale) thank you for your sweet words you always have the right thing to say gemma - thank you so much - I like that bloody great heh! And umm you know missy - when will you do a duet or two - would love to see you meeting minds - now that would be quite amazing Thanks gem xxoo Red- of course you can do a duet silly just let the poet know - I am sure they will more than accomodating Thank you for reading and appreciating xxoo Lng Jhn - oh the salvation part was a toughie too thanks for saying that Thank you guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-17-2003 02:03 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: lol my mom read this and very cool her interpretation immediately was that of an abandoned child . . . |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Aenimal - an amazing write you two... BC |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Everyone and trust me all the good stuff is Sue's |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 (says so much cos i cant atm...stupid splint) loved it OBVIOUSLY dahlings!!!  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph has yet to disclose that he is a pathological liar (oops) Thanks Kris what happened to you? Bill - thank you so much - always xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-16-2003 12:54 PM).] |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
A very Duet With you too! Enjoyed the write Deeply ARCTIC WIND |
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