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Sucker Fish
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Sucker Fish |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Sucker Fish He's still behind, this plain green fish; the algae's clouding up the glass. He works across again, the horseshoe mouth writes small transparent marks, the letters of an endless, wordless message on the planes of his square world. The other crossings, other angles, random curves and traces follow food that's growing, growing, every line a derivation of another line, a further line, of lines to come, to fade to green, recross and cross again like leaves on fallen leaves. They're getting bigger as he grows to fit the space; the letters merge to equilibrium, this world not fully clear but never quite so cloudy as it might have been, had he not scrawled these mindless lines of clarity across the glass. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wonderful! I dig it.  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"this world not fully clear but never quite so cloudy as it might have been, had he not scrawled these mindless lines of clarity across the glass." goes to show.....everyone has their place in this world Great read |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Dontcha just love them sucker fishies heh... A great write Ed, enjoyed it very much. Maree |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...The murky waters of life are made clearer in many ways, even for a fish. I really like this! |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
lovely write, i love it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write Ed! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sometimes a poet has to write about himself... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
never quite so cloudy as it might have been, had he not scrawled these mindless lines of clarity across the glass. yes, it helps to chase away the demons |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I enjoyed this one. We all have our little place, don't we? Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....nibble-nibble...! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
nice write, i like! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
he grows to fit the space; the letters merge to equilibrium, this world not fully clear but never quite so cloudy as it might have been, had he not scrawled these mindless lines of clarity across the glass. Mere moments of clarity make all the muddling through murkiness worthwhile. *S* I like this very much, sir! *S* |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
this world not fully clear but never quite so cloudy as it might have been, had he not scrawled these mindless lines of clarity across the glass. Yes, Ed.......even though situations of life may still not be completely clear, cleaning away some of the cloudiness sure does help, doean't it?  Hugs  Ethel |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Amen to that, GG.... it definitely can help, and many of yours do help, because you have such clear vision. Even the endless "poem" written by my little green fish. Other fish in that tank, but Algae Eater's mine because he speaks to me. Hi, Suthern, gooda seeya! ....and speaking of poetry, when.....? .....Hmmmmmm? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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OwlPoet Junior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 17Fullerton, California, Urantia |
Ed, There's something fishy about this poem, but I can place it. Perhaps it's transparent, but I'm so clouded by this growth on my walls that I missed it. Isnt there a tool they sell for this? WP Will Patrick [This message has been edited by OwlPoet (06-29-2003 08:36 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yep.....yer tongue.....Howdy, Will! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed: a purge indeed . . . you brought me into that tank seeing the world in a much different view xxoo |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I see very deep meaning in this. Wow, what a great poem. When everything feels like the movies |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
My plecostamus is weary He's hard as a rock from the sea He's lately been very dizzy My cichlids won't let him be. The algae lines across the glass Are crooked-uneven and few He's two feet long in a very large tank Eats algae of green but seems so blue. |
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