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Between the lines..... |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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I edited my poem so you couldn’t read between the lines wouldn’t read how it defines..... My heart is already on display I changed my vocabulary so you’d have to guess as to my intent guess just what I meant.... My message is clear enough I revised my final draft so to be sure I’d made no errors in my rhyme sure not to waste any of your time.... My clock doesn’t work I decided not to post it so you wouldn’t know carefully metered devotion know this raw emotion..... My love has always been yours ~SEA~ |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
"I changed my vocabulary so you’d have to guess as to my intent guess just what I meant.... My message is clear enough" I LOVE THIS ! (hubby says I use big words to confuse him).....I do not, well not on purpose.... I love the symbolism of the entire write, but I always have my favorites and the part about changing vocabulary was WONDERFUL! Going in the library! Tima C Some women wait for something to change and nothing does, so they change themselves. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
going in my library too! wonderful write Susan! |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
SEA...I love the total honesty of this poem. You wore your heart on your sleeve so to speak. This poem had great emotion and intensity of passion. ***Ivy Rose |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, I love the whole poem, but this part especially..... I edited my poem so you couldn’t read between the lines wouldn’t read how it defines..... My heart is already on display I changed my vocabulary so you’d have to guess as to my intent guess just what I meant.... My message is clear enough Very, very good writing!!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Only you can edit so well and leave a polished finish! You are so good at what you do SEAgal!! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I love this write!  |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all very much for your kind and generous replies |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, ============================= My heart is already on display ... My message is clear enough ... My clock doesn’t work ... My love has always been yours ============================= I got all of it but the clock.  But I love it... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
rofl....I was thinking about that line and thought.... "my clock runs backwards" or something to that effect....sigh anyway that was the idea with that one  |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Perfect. Edited to perfection.. Very impressive, I extremly enjoyed. Beautiful! Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
ROTFLMFO I feel better already! If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Ha!! Ya can't fool me!!! I majored in reading between the lines!!!!  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great poem... my favorite...of all my favorites of yours! Eric |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful!! I love it!! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now you made me laugh - see Sea? Your clock never stops! When on earth do you even have the time to write these wonderful poems? I got it, and I loved it too. Miss ya |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Very clever!--but I could SEA between the lines!  Lovin' hugs, EA |
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