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Crown Of Ariadne (26,000TH POST)
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Crown Of Ariadne (26,000TH POST) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(Here's a song I've been working on two weeks in the making, which I feel I have finally polished to the point I wanted! This is a mid-tempo bittersweet rock ballad inspired by the feelings for my lost love on New Years Day!)  Crown Of Ariadne By: Noah Eaton 6/26/03 She left too soon Deep into the background Of a garrisoned sea We used to divide and conquer together... I slid the Minotaur for you Before you slit my throat With Minerva's little diatribe With these surrogate confessions God knows who could hear... Here in this black hole dream of Talus Not even a ball of thread could help me escape This indelible mousetrap of emotion That I stubbornly tranced askance into... So I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you And I can't promise anything But I can assure you my love for you will remain true And somewhere beneath the ivory forehead And the unmerciful siren song that deafens me... I know I've set you free Baby, baby, baby, you are free... I must confess I heard it all through the seagulls How could I know exactly what they meant? I wanted to apologize for sounding a bit ungrateful Though I knew you never had the intent... Times like these I feel like Icarus Trying to rob the heavens in defying gravity Thinking I could have it all Lest that I come running on empty Unselfishly, I embraced the sun so I could prove That I am only human Flying through the air in my hit and run with etymology Swallowing the sea of my impulsions God knows Pallas could turn me into a bird If I just stopped for one second And know I can never win... So I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you And I can't promise anything But I can assure you my love for you will remain true And somewhere beneath the ivory forehead And the unmerciful siren song that deafens me... I know I've set you free Baby, baby, baby, you are free... Let go of me gently You are free Let go of me gently You are free let go of me gently You are free... Last January you were still marigold You know the seasons will never lie But I'm just a valetudinarian wasted on the alpenglow Of forty-thousand twilights... Yet the butterflies, the miller moths Oh, resting in pieces can be iatrogenic Even if that is not what falling means I still can hear the incidental music And isn't it refreshing To know your fate is being lamented Then it all becomes evident That some higher light is watching over you? You know as I let go I'll be crying You know that I'll be breaking But you know that I'll remember Being thankful for the better person you made me... So I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you And I can't promise anything But I can assure you my love for you will remain true And somewhere beneath the ivory forehead And the unmerciful siren song that deafens me... I know I've set you free Baby, baby, baby, you are free... Baby I have set you free Baby I have set you free Baby You are free Baby You are free... I still see you in the stars I still see you in the stars I still see you in the stars... Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (06-28-2003 12:35 AM).] |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Speechless....(if you can imangine that) Great song/poem....I loved it! |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Noah...You are as talented a songwriter as you are a poet. Though the subject was sad; yet your beauteous words just made this song one of bittersweet. ***Ivy Rose |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 YOU GO NOAH!Congrats!  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Noah, this makes me yearn for the long playing record again just so I could hear it all. I'm sure the Gods are smiling at this. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic words here Noah! Congrats on your 26,000th post! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"So I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you And I can't promise anything But I can assure you my love for you will remain true And somewhere beneath the ivory forehead And the unmerciful siren song that deafens me... I know I've set you free Baby, baby, baby, you are free..." I love love love this part... such an emotional write Noah....congratulations on 26,ooo!  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
CONGRATS NOAH !! BEAUTIFUL AND STRAIGHT FROM YOUR HEART. HUGS, CHRIS  "Said you'd give me light... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
26000 posts, Noah you are a giant in numbers and in content of beauty. This is a sweet song and I love the ending ... you can still see her in the stars. Hopefully without pain anymore. Very beautiful! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Noah, just another splendid piece of work here! I love this! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Wonderful song Noah...congratulations on 26,000 posts...awesome!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Congratulations Noah, both on your 26th, and writing such a poem that marries mythology so concisely with your emotion. Keep on keepin' on, Sweet Noah. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"So I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you And I can't promise anything But I can assure you my love for you will remain true And somewhere beneath the ivory forehead And the unmerciful siren song that deafens me... I know I've set you free Baby, baby, baby, you are free..." Such beautiful words written from the heart Great write! *hugs* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
If there is any one lesson of love it is the need to be free...you have said it well... For though we value relationships there must always be the understanding that no one is obligated to love us...it is a blessing that grows in the heart and is as mysterious as the wind and the rain and the moon and the stars...congratulations on 26,000 posts. James |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
You know as I let go I'll be crying You know that I'll be breaking But you know that I'll remember Being thankful for the better person you made me... So I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you And I can't promise anything But I can assure you my love for you will remain true And somewhere beneath the ivory forehead And the unmerciful siren song that deafens me... I know I've set you free Baby, baby, baby, you are free... My sweet friend..... No matter what happens in a relationship, part of the person we are comes from them. I can tell how much you have grown as a person in this wonderful write of yours. Thank you for sharing this part of your heart with us, dear Noah. And.... CONGRATULATIONS, NOAH ON 26,000 POSTS  I have enjoyed every one of your posts that I have read. I hope to read many, many more of them. Thank you for being you, Noah!!!! Hugs to you, friend Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-28-2003 04:30 PM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Congratulations Noah!! 26,000 posts; I'm in awe. I love your poem even though it is a sad heartbreaker. Hang in there sweet friend, one day soon you will find another love. Huggles, Marti |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
congrats Noah and yes this is a heartbreaker  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'd love to hear it as a song, but it was so sad. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Wow, awesome right, very much enjoyed, this was perfection....lovely simply stunning |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write... 26,000 wow,,,,,,,,, A voice of honesty |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This was "brilliant" in more ways than one, Dear Noah! "I threw your crown into the heavens I created the stars just for you." --I still see you in the stars... From your pain, you have created such beauty.  Congratulations on 26,000 posts! May a special someone suddenly appear and fill your heart and soul with cheer.  Linda  |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
WOW ... "This indelible mousetrap of emotion" And indeed it was, you had me captured throughout this piece. And Congratulations ... oh beautiful man of words. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - I can't even count to 26,000. These are lovely words. I'm sure the music is the same... BC |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
rising from all the stars in the heavens your poetry couples and gathers great distance into a serene closeness whic surrounds. Beautiful write, and many congrats, keep em flowing. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Noah...Congratulations, my friend. This is the other side of wonderful! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
CONGRATS! Beautifully written! |
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