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The Pity Party
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The Pity Party |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
The Pity Party…. It was darned near closing time Mrs. Jones had been played one last time and there at the end of the bar stood he, my husband, pouring wine I was at the other end, the wallflower at twenty-one no one remembered the birthday girl, until a gentle old man said “Hello, little gal…. you have such a pretty face so here’s a shot on me, I’ve filled it to the brim but I’ll tell you quick, my girl if you drown your sorrows in that shot your sorrows will only be dimmed until the ’morrow’s light…” I looked then, at the drink, then back at the old man but there was no one beside me and only a full drink was there in my warm hand. I took a sip and felt the heat sliding through my veins and it struck me a lightning bolt the thought of life, insane… for if I drained this very glass and left it not half full my life could roll right out of sight and sorrow would be the pull. I left the drink standing there, and My husband? Otherwise engaged, so I went home alone, but wise and felt no hint of rage. For on my birthday, that one day my intended thought to flirt with every gal inside that bar had them pawing at his shirt. I knew it by the time of 3:00 that he would not be home, and I thought of the old man, his glass, and of his tone, and resolved right then and there, you see, for my glass to remain at least half-full… and though it took some time and a try or two… I got rid of that young fool. It could have been a pity-party… God knows I tried my best, but for every bit of way I gave he still failed every test… but I kept that glass half-full, and sometimes, to the brim… and funny now, a challenge read, and it made me think of him. For the pity I almost had could have kept the past years sad and could have left me the bigger fool if I had felt the pity pull. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-27-2003 10:31 PM).] |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
"It could have been a pity-party… God knows I tried my best, but for every bit of way I gave he still failed every test… but I kept that glass half-full, and sometimes, to the brim… and funny now, a challenge read, and it made me think of him. For the pity I almost had could have kept the past years sad and could have left me the bigger fool if I had felt the pity pull."  Truly Exquisite !!!! Going in the Library......  Some women wait for something to change and nothing does, so they change themselves. -Audre Lorde [This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (06-27-2003 10:28 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
THIS IS AWESOME!!! oh YES, OH YES, WOW!!! Love every line of it....and so true...thanx Deca....ya warmed us up tonite with this one... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Someone once told me a long time ago, we can feel sorry for someone for so long, and then comes a time when, you can't do anything for them, they've got to help themselves and in order to do that, must want it bad enough...some will complain but never change...and that's ok for them, but might not be for us...and if we settle for that choice, it might be for life...not to mention, affecting many lives of others. Very very very good read...thank you for sharing. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
a great poem, loved it. Jason |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Woweeee!! Excellent Deca dear. hugs, Chris "Said you'd give me light... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
love this...h |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deca...wonderful poem and message, my friend! |
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TasteOfOctober Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 94 |
now this was something I enjoyed. I loved what you said and how you said it. well except for that left the drink standin bit. j/k. lol. but seriously, thank you. loved it. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
For the pity I almost had could have kept the past years sad and could have left me the bigger fool if I had felt the pity pull. Wow, Deca...this is fabulous. You know someone said to me (just the other night) the following that I am sure I am misquoting, but you will get the picture: "He who cares least, always wins." This statement sticks in my mind. I wonder that although there was not a pity party, if the pain still remains in memory. A great write! And now you got me thinking! Patricia |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
much enjoyed how you tell your tale in a clipped fashion..  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It could have been a pity-party… God knows I tried my best, but for every bit of way I gave he still failed every test… but I kept that glass half-full, and sometimes, to the brim… and funny now, a challenge read, and it made me think of him. For the pity I almost had could have kept the past years sad and could have left me the bigger fool if I had felt the pity pull Yes!!!!  Decaflame, I love this....and I'm keeping it, so that I can read it over and over when that part of me that wants to worry about the past tries to take over. Thank you very much.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very good Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice,, enjoyed... A voice of honesty |
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JilGirl Member
since 2003-05-24
Posts 364Washington |
A wallop of wisdom packed in one poem! SO very true! Chosen victory outsmarts defeat. Strength of words in this awesome write! 'Tiz feathers that make the bird - |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Perfect for the challenge besides being an excellent poem. just wonderful writing, you at your best hugss M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you have such a pretty face so here’s a shot on me, I’ve filled it to the brim but I’ll tell you quick, my girl if you drown your sorrows in that shot your sorrows will only be dimmed until the ’morrow’s light…” I looked then, at the drink, then back at the old man but there was no one beside me and only a full drink was there in my warm hand. I took a sip and felt the heat sliding through my veins and it struck me a lightning bolt the thought of life, insane… for if I drained this very glass and left it not half full my life could roll right out of sight and sorrow would be the pull. ================================ Is it just meant to be that we have these epiphanies at a time when we need clarity the most. Powerful write of wisdom and a perfect response to the challege. Thy pen is always half full dear decca  All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Deca, this is a stunning write, a lesson of wisdom to be cherished. Love, Margherita |
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beachbabe New Member
since 2003-06-28
Posts 8Klamath Falls, Oregon |
That was a beutiful poem...it really touched me!! *~*~Nichol~*~* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Gripping....love the subtle way you handled this theme. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Splendid write, thought provoking. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It could have been a pity-party… God knows I tried my best, For the pity I almost had could have kept the past years sad Thank you for lighting the match under my butt Decaflame~ Loved this poem of yours~ |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
you know, you could pass this off as being Ethel's callenge poem, talking about a glass half full. Bitter and mysterious I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Does that mean BluesSerenade is in the hot seat?  Decaflame, Wow! This is a keeper. What an awesome write this is. Incredible.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Deca, since this does go right along with my challenge.... /pip/Forum7/HTML/000567.html I'm bumping it back up. LOL Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-28-2003 11:56 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I could have used that advice... but I stayed for the party. *S* I like this so much, Deca... identify so much... it's a library addition for sure. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your inkwell runneth over in poetic wisdom! And a challenge well-met, this be!  Warm hugs, EA |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, Deca, I can't believe I missed this fantastic write, a wonderful message indeed. Maree fate is not just |
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