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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 You smile as you say ‘Hello’ it’s all I can do to not fall apart..... smile deny pretend my heart isn’t dying right here right now that burn I feel behind my eyes won’t betray me give you clues as to what depth this.... ache need really goes instead I laugh, dismiss refuse choke down these emotions and again resist the urge to tell you how much I love you while casually returning a friendly ‘hello’ ~SEA~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! that hurts!  i know |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You smile as you say ‘Hello’ it’s all I can do to not fall apart..... smile deny pretend my heart isn’t dying right here right now that burn I feel behind my eyes won’t betray me ======================= *sigh* where would a moth be without the burn...the ache ... the denial. (YKTIKYK) heart string tugging poetry Susan-girlie. All I can feel is this distance between you and me. I can say I love you but I can't make you believe me because touching is believing. c.j. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (06-26-2003 06:30 AM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Oh wow...you have captured a moment so beautifuly. Eric |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Hello  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hello == Hey-Love just change a bit of the sound and it works... this is nice poetry... sad in its essence, but suppose a hello in return, however casual is better than silence... at least it provides forever hope? regards sudhir |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh yes...how often we do this to ourselves...great write darlin' |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now, you have my mind just reeling - did she know this guy in a past life? Is she married? Is he a friend from her childhood, or is this instant love? Goodness, but you get a girl's head just whirling first thing in the morning don't ya? |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
A wave of words fitting such a ravishing Sea, but a tongue willed and witting shall set your heart free. Let each word flow from tow to crest. Ask of Love they know that would be your test. If word comes with a pause do not yet set fears his own heart the cause adding a Sea of Tears.  (surfs up!!) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SEA  does that answer the question? |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you guys rock! thank you all very much... and Sy.... right back to ya! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
yay SEA, I loved this! I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
SEA - yup, I am keeping this one!! Been there....felt that....you have captured the ache perfectly. hugs, Chris "Said you'd give me light... |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Some would call it being responsible... others would say "go for it"... I say good write. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
that burn I feel behind my eyes won’t betray me give you clues as to what depth this.... ache need really goes instead I laugh, dismiss refuse choke down these emotions and again resist the urge to tell you how much I love you while casually returning a friendly ‘hello’ Yep, I've been there and done that, too....so, I do know the feeling. I'm keeping this, too.....  Hugs  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-26-2003 11:26 AM).] |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
"You smile as you say ‘Hello’ it’s all I can do to not fall apart....." Now a line from one of mine... "I saw him just today, his smile is still the same. He looked at me and smiled, but never spoke my name." Who ever eould have thought that a smile (such a wonderful thing), could break a heart! Wonderful write SEA! Certainly a read againer! Some women wait for something to change and nothing does, so they change themselves. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Powerful! Too, too powerful, too, too is to understand. Extremely well done, part of me wishes I didn't know that feeling so well, that I didn't comprehend your pain. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
You really did a good one here. And if you hide it well enough, how will he ever know? That's not good, is it? Sigh. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Ah! This was excellent! “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Excellent Susan.. I know this feeling well. ~Hugs~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SEA - that's a very nice hello... BC |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
An excellent piece of self-control. I like it, Melton |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
SEA...What emotion could be held under the simple word "hello"? Think how many times it is said...wheew! Wonderful poem! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh my, Susan...you just wrote me. I know this painfully well. Wow...this...right now...it's MINE. Hugs to you, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Yep...it's me again...just been reading this, over and over, and had to tell you again how deeply this one hits for me. Typing this through tears...I KNOW this one...and it hurts. Hugs again, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
le sigh... what can I say to this? heh... not much, I know this as well. Beautiful and tear-jerking... It is said the Creator has taken a handful of South Wind and given each newborn Arabian the power of flight without wings |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh, SEA, I have known this. You expressed the feeling so well. Patricia |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I sometimes envy the way you write, because I find so much in your poetry, the way you express emotions and I wish I could somehow reach that place you already know so well. I love this, Susan. It's wonderful! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Oh my!!!!!! you took the words right out of my mouth - know the feeling well bella! Thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem with us! Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Susan Many powerful emotions were felt through your well written words. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, that's the feeling, exactly....the same for both sides of the equation, and that's nice to know. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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SuperDave Junior Member
since 2002-09-12
Posts 48Little House on the Hill |
As others have said I know the feeling well. You may hold yourself back but there does come a time (and person) when that just can't happen. How about a part II for this? By the way great visual arrangement as well. David |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
resist the urge to tell you how much I love you while casually returning a friendly ‘hello’ This is a heart toucher, SEA... so beautiful. *S* |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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