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Open Poetry #27

Speak (revised from open 25)

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

0 posted 2003-06-25 07:51 PM

Speak

Words melt away,
like chalk in the rain,
eyes cast down,
towards the ground-
desperate in their fevered
silence.
And you fade away,
like a picture,
torn in half,
as I wait
for you to-
Speak

I really liked this poem, but it needed some small changes and I'm sorry if I caused anyone trouble by reposting it.

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

[This message has been edited by littlewing (06-25-2003 07:53 PM).]

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

1 posted 2003-06-25 07:54 PM

Liz:

nice writing . . .
I loved the chalk melting image
xxoo

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-06-25 08:44 PM

Nice writing Liz thanks for reposting

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

3 posted 2003-06-25 08:47 PM

Well, I'm glad you re-posted.. I'd never read this before. I really love this write,

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

4 posted 2003-06-25 09:01 PM

Thank you

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

timothysangel1973

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since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

5 posted 2003-06-25 10:08 PM

First time I've read, but will most certainly read again!! Great write.... Tima

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

6 posted 2003-06-25 10:15 PM

I like it especially the chalk part..good to see you around

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

7 posted 2003-06-25 10:21 PM

Thanks

I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war,
If you can tell me something worth fighting for
-coldplay

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

8 posted 2003-06-26 02:46 AM

whoohoo! thanks for reposting

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

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Pencilveinia, USA

9 posted 2003-06-26 05:41 AM

this gave me shivers...

into me library this goes..

love gem xxxxx

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2003-06-27 07:46 AM

sometimes the waiting for the words from another..and not knowing what they are going to be, is difficult... you captured that well here...

glad you reposted... I enjoyed.

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