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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-06-12 04:37 PM

You who writes so smoothly upon my icey chest.
You who draws snow angels upon my breast.
You lied.
I tried to erase you,
but even if it isn't visual,
it's optical.

On my body,
you who used me as a canvas,
will never disappear.
Like the quiet words that came from my
withered lips and stopped just
before your ear.

You say things void of meaning,
you describe how I've been feeling.
Cold canvas, I'm not
really even here, anymore.
To tell
you who manipulates my skin to
climb up into my passion.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-06-12 04:39 PM

I really enjoyed this read a lot.

Cold hands means a warm heart

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

2 posted 2003-06-12 04:44 PM

ouch

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2003-06-12 07:57 PM

I think I just swallowed an ice cube.
OOH, hope you are OK, Kaoru.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-06-14 04:03 AM

wow!

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

5 posted 2003-07-03 11:35 PM

~Sigh~ Loved this.

You made a small spelling error in the first line though. Icey is spelled icy, I think...?

Anyways, this is very very very good.

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

6 posted 2003-07-03 11:36 PM

(Sticking it in the library)

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2003-07-04 12:06 PM

a place where we feel with anger forming from hurt...this to shall pass...as nothing is accomplished from misunderstandings. Wishing you peace and joy this day.

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

8 posted 2003-07-05 10:53 AM

"but even if it isn't visual,
it's optical."

I loved that line.

And so true ... out of sight ... is not out of mind. But ohhhh how a broken heart wishes it were true.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

9 posted 2003-07-06 01:11 PM

Meghan:

Cold canvas, I'm not
really even here, anymore.
To tell

God . . . I do know this feeling
xxoo

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