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Portrait (Honeybee's Challenge)
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Portrait (Honeybee's Challenge) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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In mirror framed a portrait of my decline canvas loose and tattered over bonework An uninspired image cold and distant rendered by bristles of a life unkind The oils dulled and worn lifeless eyes cry for sleep following gaze in wretched plea for restoration **Well I'm not sure this quite fits the challenge as you intended. I originally tried the letter to my body but had to scrap it or I'd have had to sue myself for libel. The one I've posted quickly degenerated into not only a vision of body but one of soul so I abrubtly stopped it after the third verse. Ah self image such a beaufitul thing...yeesh** [This message has been edited by Aenimal (05-01-2003 11:50 AM).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
You've answered the challenge well, you've gone above and beyond with this unique piece. I'm glad that you answered, you're such a talented poet and always seem to convey emotion with such depth, power with adding a unique flair. I like the theme you used and the first and last stanzas really hit home. I'm saving this in my library...you're just too good for words. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Self portraits and or letters to our bodies... hmmm.. I think I'll stay hidden..lol it does however, look to me like you answered well... |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Awesome piece! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Raph, Loved the poem and can relate. But, I especially love your sense of humor in the paragraph following it. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Melissa thanks for the challenge haven't been writing lately. Also as always thanks for the kind words Thanks Cpat I only come out at night Thanks Brad Thanks Pat sometimes you just have to laugh. And looking at my reflection I usually do..in between screams of what the.....?! Thank you thank you I'll be here all week remember to tip your waitress. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow !!  Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Raffaele, I think your creation is unique in its powerful expression ... you are so young and rather hard on yourself, no narcissistic shade here ... a very inspired poet for sure! Devi essere gentile con te stesso un po' di più! tvb - che significherà mai? Margherita |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks alot Chris Yes Margherita very young but self depreciation is a gift. I'm a natural. grin Lo so, ho provato di essere piu gentile ma con la vita mie no e felice. Che vol dire tvb - che significherà mai? [This message has been edited by Aenimal (05-01-2003 10:06 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh my gosh, I think you did a wonderful job detailing your self-portrait, sweet friend, a fine daguerrotype that should fit proudly on the alter of your hearts bookshelf! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, well-done, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
dagguerotype? I prefer to think of myself as an Andre Kertesz grin..thanks Noah |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: brilliant write - as always (backing away from this challenge myself) brave soul you are . . . hmmm . . . the uninspired I would have to argue with you about . . . nice job xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue thanks, if yu want to back away back away from my face it's harmful to your health and I don't want you to get hurt..  |
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