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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Savannah afternoons Can sweat. Humidity hangs too close And blocks the voyeuristic breeze From exploring with its touch The places we would prefer cool. I left the bench And sought someplace dark and cool To wile away the few hours between Noon’s burn of sun And evenings change of tide. I found Charlie’s On a side street The door said “Cool Inside” Just like any local bar It was dark and stank of stale beer Unwashed bodies and stale smoke So it was just my sort of place. I sat at the bar and ordered a beer I just stared at more than anything As I listened to the barkeep Debate with a guy he called “Doc” About the merits of the US Getting involved in the Middle East. Didn’t take me long to tune them out And turn my attention to the mirror behind the bar Where I could watch a young couple Who must have wandered in like I did. They were engrossed in the lean Across table top and touch of hands, Shy smiles and glances meeting coy returns. Not yet Lovers, I thought But almost. Maybe tonight they would seal the deal And either cling Or depart With memories of an afternoon In the romantic South. Made me remember A few times I had thought love Would save me Or at least grace me with a fond memory, Then I thought of Lilly and of how she and I Had burned bright the midnight And carried sunbeams into evenings. I shrugged and laughed. Doc and the ‘keep Stopped their war of words and stared. I just dropped a five on the bar top And headed for the door… Wondering if Jean was in a good mood And if Rita’s was too busy for A corner booth where I could watch The people come and go. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (04-29-2003 01:54 PM).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Cool write....I like your stories!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...don't I remember Doc? I do believe so...  ...May I tell you once again... that what? I can't repeat myself? Ah well, then... I shall let the others come in and do so for me... and I will grin all afternoon...  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I love this....I really do....What did Lilly look like....and Doc? hugs for this. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes...ooooh yesss....as my sister just asked.. what did Lilly look like..? Tell us more and...soon...please?  ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
The Captain's been on a roll! I always enjoy reading your insightful stories. I'm sure there's a lot of you in them.  Sunkised. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
nice |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
When I go into a bar I always like to sit close to a mirror so I can see whats going on behind me...it can be interesting...James |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Not yet Lovers, I thought But almost. Maybe tonight they would seal the deal And either cling Or depart With memories of an afternoon In the romantic South. Made me remember A few times I had thought love Would save me Or at least grace me with a fond memory, Then I thought of Lilly and of how she and I Had burned bright the midnight And carried sunbeams into evenings.' Remember those afternoons... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Sorry, forgot this... 'Savannah afternoons Can sweat. Humidity hangs too close And blocks the voyeuristic breeze From exploring with its touch The places we would prefer cool.' Great verse bud... |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Cpat Hair, nice write I loved it Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Well Duncan quoted the two parts I like the best. So interesting... I think I saw another one... Great, two in a day...I say just about the same thing each new addition to this story...you put me right there... with such fine details I can smell the place. Enjoyed, Hugs Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ok...the moth is playing catch up to see what you and Dunc have done while I was off playing last week....so now Im headed to Rosewalds Park |
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