Open Poetry #26 |
Tie Dying the Sky |
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The sky lights with changing colors bursting shining fierce expelling the darkness dashing lifting each rising breath surmounting over the top keening with intent penetrating eyes gasping deep into pupils dilating fall from the reign tears land on contact watering a field of irises spring into bloom a tentative sparkle splashing bequeathing my cries sent in a hush whispering quietly stills the night with a distant sound that no longer echo's leaving behind an assortment of colors tie dying the sky removing the stars I used to look up to make believing in wishes I once held so true. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Wow, Bluesy This is a lovely spill from Iris to Iris. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A true serenade......earning your nick. Need strings of straggling acoustic seventh chords behind this........ ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...So many images...almost felt them hitting me as I read and felt like falling...intense writing. Hugs, you! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Keep those dreams alive.....they, as you, are vibrant with much color.....HUGSSSS you Lauren~ Through the darkness |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - I used to look up to make believing in wishes I once held so true. Also did I look many times, I wonder if they do come true... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I still look up now and then...just in case. good write lady |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Great images here Blues..enjoyed! Maree |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic imagery here Lori! Very much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bequeathing my cries sent in a hush whispering quietly stills the night with a distant sound that no longer echo's leaving behind an assortment of colors tie dying the sky removing the stars I used to look up to make believing in wishes I once held so true. wonderful lines.. and so as usual.. I have to say how well done it is... lol.. and tell you I enjoyed.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
beautiful... very regards to you, sudhir |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lori, ya know the beauty of your spirit shines in your words. You are just lovely gal, as is this! Hugs. ~D~ I must have had my momma's will |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, Wonderful images. Very creative. Flowed right down the page. Loved the ending thoughts. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Exemplary word play down this page... refreshing in the thunderstorm...that turned into a spring shower. So good Blues! TD |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Awesome, Bluesy one, loved every line. Sunkissed. |
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