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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-04-28 10:23 PM



The sky lights
with changing colors
bursting
shining fierce
expelling the darkness
dashing
lifting each rising breath
surmounting
over the top  
keening with intent
penetrating eyes
gasping
deep into pupils
dilating
fall from the reign
tears land on contact
watering
a field of irises
spring into bloom
a tentative sparkle
splashing
bequeathing my cries
sent in a hush
whispering quietly
stills the night
with a distant sound
that no longer echo's
leaving behind  
an assortment of colors
tie dying the sky
removing the stars
I used to look up to
make believing in wishes
I once held so true.

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wranx
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1 posted 2003-04-28 10:52 PM


Wow, Bluesy

This is a lovely spill from Iris to Iris.

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2 posted 2003-04-28 11:00 PM


A true serenade......earning your nick. Need strings of straggling acoustic seventh chords behind this........

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Martie
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3 posted 2003-04-28 11:06 PM


Lori...So many images...almost felt them hitting me as I read and felt like falling...intense writing.  Hugs, you!
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4 posted 2003-04-28 11:18 PM


Keep those dreams alive.....they, as you, are vibrant with much color.....HUGSSSS you


Lauren~

Through the darkness
I can see your light
And you will always shine
And I can feel your heart in mine

I will remember you

Bill Charles
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5 posted 2003-04-29 12:23 PM


BluesSerenade -

I used to look up to
make believing in wishes
I once held so true.

Also did I look many times, I wonder if they do come true...

BC

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-04-29 01:16 AM


I still look up now and then...just in case.

good write lady

Dark Angel
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7 posted 2003-04-29 08:28 AM


Great images here Blues..enjoyed!

Maree

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8 posted 2003-04-29 08:38 AM


Fantastic imagery here Lori!
Very much enjoyed.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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9 posted 2003-04-29 09:41 AM


bequeathing my cries
sent in a hush
whispering quietly
stills the night
with a distant sound
that no longer echo's
leaving behind  
an assortment of colors
tie dying the sky
removing the stars
I used to look up to
make believing in wishes
I once held so true.


wonderful lines.. and so as usual.. I have to say how well done it is... lol.. and tell you I enjoyed..


Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 2003-04-29 09:43 AM


beautiful... very

regards to you,
sudhir

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11 posted 2003-04-29 10:17 AM


Lori, ya know the beauty of your spirit shines in your words.  You are just lovely gal, as is this!  Hugs.
~D~

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

vandana
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12 posted 2003-04-29 10:33 AM


nice
regards2you
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13 posted 2003-04-29 10:55 AM



Lori,

Wonderful images. Very creative.
Flowed right down the page. Loved the ending thoughts.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

ThisDiamond
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14 posted 2003-04-29 01:53 PM


Exemplary word play down this page...
refreshing in the thunderstorm...that turned into a spring shower. So good Blues! TD

Sunkissed
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15 posted 2003-04-29 02:33 PM


Awesome, Bluesy one, loved every line.


Sunkissed.

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