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when "sorry" ain't enough
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when "sorry" ain't enough |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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pressure flat palm on the wound make the blood stop spurting scream take two sides and force a knit by human will of this can't be... talk in murmer slow slide sweet measure breath and low heart beat kiss the sweat between the brow and drop a few betraying truth of the knowledge that control is now beyond my hands... Take the ache of dark meat shine sliced as if the butcher grinned a bandage splayed, (a butterfly?) holding skin to skin to mend as the juices red rejoice and quicken as the well-planned plot, an argument is thickening and skin is just the truth in clot trauma troubles palette hues one bad mix can haunt a bruise yellows sicken into green and edge the stain of yesterday in silent words of inbetween with the berry reds of puce. There are things that once disturbed will never break the rings of word drifting from a rock in toss circles widen to the shore-- wavering timidity-- gravely digging graves I swore circles would not be confound-- I cannot still the waves of this... Take this herb and willow leaf-- chew the bark for some relief. I'll hold the sides together--thus-- and curse my words--so sharp, they cut... I will pray we are both healed. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
oh, this is such a tremendous write! So many times I've wished that I could heal the damage my words had done. I appreciated this piece, and applaud you for it's content! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord Woman! how you took a wound and a bruise and the changing of its colors . . . the gash . . . the rings in the water . . . amazing how you make me see through your eyes . . . xxoo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A reflection of the healers' art is the length and breadth of evidence The cicatrix... ~yeti |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My goodness Karen....this write made me wince in vivid memory I had hidden. Well done. Bless you. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I went back to pick a line or two that would best illustrate what I'd like to say about the strength and originality of the imagery in this poem -- and failed. And it seems silly to copy and paste the whole thing; there's no high point where every line is a high point. This is a fine outing -- the subject is painful but the poem sure isn't! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Oh my gosh...words can cut so deeply and leave a wound that takes a long time to heal...My heart was touched by this poem...I pray, also, that both are healed.... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, like Ed said, I also didn't want to quote the whole poem. Even though it brought back many, many painful memories, it was a really good write. There are things that once disturbed will never break the rings of word drifting from a rock in toss circles widen to the shore-- wavering timidity-- gravely digging graves I swore circles would not be confound-- I cannot still the waves of this... Take this herb and willow leaf-- chew the bark for some relief. I'll hold the sides together--thus-- and curse my words--so sharp, they cut... I will pray we are both healed. This part, though, I wished many times before my husband died. Once those words (and other abuse) are said and done, it cannot be taken back. And, it lives with you (me), even though you (I) try so hard to forget it all and wipe it out of mind completely. Maybe time does help things to heal. I certainly do hope so, for myself and others...and you, too, sweet friend, if these writes are from your own personal experiences. K, I never mean to get so long-winded in my replies, but if I ever get started in my replies to your poetry, I seem to go on and on. They just touch me so deeply. And, I also want you to know that I really do understand Hugs to you, sweet friend   Ethel |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Keeping this one, Karen, for my medicine shelf. Unbelievable imagery. Hurting and soothing all wrapped up into one. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
there are things that our forgiveness are unworthy of...h |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Brilliant write healer |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
amazing.... oh my...... breathless hug |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I cannot still the waves of this...  Why is it we can seem to write so much better in pain? I hate to even equate this write to levels of pain, as it is excellent. If that were the case, it would mean you are beyond being a strong lady. Karen, you are SO talented, and I wish you would believe that! I can't even pick any other line as to dissect this more than I did would be criminal. Carpe' Diem [This message has been edited by Mysteria (04-27-2003 02:58 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: We'll talk...on how good this is... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
whew. Thanks for following along here, and I hope it wasn't as painful to read as it was to write--tsk..I kinda turned myself inside out for this'n. Thanks all for reading, and special thanks to a few hundred friends here who have been holding my hand lately--I feel the prayers, I truly do. (and hey...just for the record, nobody beat me up but me lately...  ) I am beginning to think that writing is the perfect hobby for a masochist...  Hugs.  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen...this is such an open wound of a poem, not to mention an AMAZING write. I don't even know what to say, so just  .My heart hurts for you, friend...you're in my thoughts and prayers...always. [This message has been edited by vlraynes (04-28-2003 01:05 AM).] |
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Mary Ann Member
since 2003-04-23
Posts 111 |
This is a terrific write! I know how it feels to say something you regret but sorry just won't cut it..the damage is done and it is years before the wound you inflict starts to heal....your poem shows insight and sensitivity ..thank you for the great read  God bless, Mary Ann |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
betraying truth of the knowledge that control is now beyond my hands... .. .. an argument is thickening and skin is just the truth in clot trauma troubles .. .. one bad mix can haunt a bruise .. .. and edge the stain of yesterday .. .. that once disturbed will never break the rings of word drifting from a rock in toss circles widen to the shore-- wavering timidity-- gravely digging graves .. .. I cannot still the waves of this... .. .. I will pray we are both healed. --------------- now did I rewrite you completely... well, I enjoyed this tremendously... Regards to you, Karen, Sudhir |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I wish awe made a noise. Then maybe I'd have something to say... As to your reply, of course it is! Why else do you think I write poetry?  Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
hey sis....guess I don't have to say how much I understand this.....incredible incredible write......talent you have in abundance |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Karen, you've left me speechless. Just know that you touch me, and I do understand although each case is it's own type of hell. I'm here for you yanno?! Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
There are things that once disturbed will never break the rings of word drifting from a rock in toss circles widen to the shore-- wavering timidity-- gravely digging graves I swore circles would not be confound-- I cannot still the waves of this... Gawd Serenity, I feel very kindred to this.....and that is why the sisterhood of poetry is such a blessing....what we feel we sometimes read in the words of others who write it so much better than we ourselves could. How painful to read, to write.... you've done it again Karen, made me wish someday I could write like this...but hey, as long as I can read you, I'm a happy girl! OUTSTANDING!! (and I know....you are a survivor also.....again...kindred...) I must have had my momma's will and Gods Amazing Grace... I'm a survivor.... (Reba) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (04-29-2003 10:30 AM).] |
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