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Open Poetry #26

Jagged razors edge

dreambuilder
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

0 posted 2003-04-23 09:19 PM

The jagged razors edge of reality
Where I dance at times
Flirting with fantasy
Daring disaster

A place of freedom
Displaying my darkness
Enticing insanity
Exposing my soul

Finding myself
What I fear most
is what I have become...

An abyss within humanity

. . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . .

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-04-23 10:01 PM

nicely thought and written

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2003-04-23 10:03 PM

That's dancing a fine line, and you've written it well.

Humanity is good natured once we learn to live with it.

Enjoyed your honest thoughts dreambuilder.

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

3 posted 2003-04-23 10:15 PM

Very nice, I enjoyed this much.

Julie

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-04-23 10:18 PM

MTS, this seems to be an honest write.
I like that.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-04-24 05:33 PM

dream:

far from darkness - I see beautiful
light shining through your words

An abyss in humanity . . .
how I feel most days

Amazing write
You are punching your way through
these pages!
xxoo

dreambuilder
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

6 posted 2003-04-24 09:05 PM

thank you for the sweet replies

[This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-24-2003 09:09 PM).]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

7 posted 2003-04-24 09:10 PM

Dream you know i know this, great write as usual

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