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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2003-04-14 11:10 AM

the day
has just broken loose
a marathon runner
in the final stretch
running after night
it has been a long one

the light blue bowl
wears a tinge of gold
in celebration
setting loose
a pack of doves
chasing one other
an unwavering glide
over the expansive sea

the sea
is on ebbing tide
as fishermen
pull their boats towards land
the catch hasn’t been
very successful
but there will be fish
for all, this evening

tomorrow
might be different
that will be another race
till then the night
is going to play catch-up
while the men
of the land of the salty breeze
catch up on their
sleep

quiet though is the breeze
almost in mourning
a sign, maybe
of the darker days ahead

but the local minstrel
is still on happy tunes
talking of glad yesterdays
of the bounties from the sea
when the catches used to be
pleasantly large
and less
oily

you and I of the city, hardly notice

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (04-14-2003 11:11 AM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2003-04-14 11:23 AM

your title caught me...Saturday afternoon I saw my neighbors out back and the little boy of 4 was holding his first fish that he had caught with his dad. He was very proud to tell me his was the largest. I got my polaroid out and took a picture for them.
The fish were grown in a hatchery, probably the only sure way of knowing they weren't contaminated.

M

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-04-14 11:37 AM

Sudhir,

I enjoy your poetry tremendously.

A way of life so few know of and well described. The first two stanzas, my favorite parts could be applied in many ways.

Thank you for sharing your poetry with us.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2003-04-14 12:46 PM

Sudhir...This could be anywhere and any time...something timeless about the way of life..you've written it so beautifully!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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4 posted 2003-04-14 12:49 PM

Oh My! Sudhir! What a beauty! Nice ending to it all! Very touching, very thought-provoking! I love this, my friend! May I keep this in my library?

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-04-14 02:28 PM

Wonderful write here Sudhir!
Packed full of fantastic imagery!
So very much enjoyed today!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2003-04-14 08:33 PM

Sudhir~
You pulled me in with this one, and I loved every word.
So wonderfully penned.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

7 posted 2003-04-14 09:57 PM

Great write Sudhir...we seldom know the struggles that others have to face daily...we do our own living and think we have it tough...thanks for provoking thought with this poem..

believe in what your heart feels...

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

8 posted 2003-04-14 10:00 PM

Pleasantly descriptive of the scene. I enjoyed it. Joyce

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2003-04-14 11:18 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Sudhir, this is wonderful, sweet friend, it saddens me to see the world being contaminated everyday and I pray we can somehow rehabilitate before all the oceans are defeated! (sad sigh) This is very heartwrenchingly honest, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

10 posted 2003-04-22 07:30 AM

You all are such special people... it is great to be here... always...

Thank you all for your kindness...

Regards and smiles,
Sudhir

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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11 posted 2003-05-26 03:47 AM

El_Campeador
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since 2003-01-29

Posts 761
Ohio, USA

12 posted 2003-05-26 08:52 AM

Another good poem... Keep writing!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

13 posted 2003-05-26 08:56 AM

Dammm,(note the spelling--I did not swear!)you're gooood! Such descriptively vivid writing!

The ending hits home

..."you and I of the city hardly notice"

Warm hugs,
Linda

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

14 posted 2003-05-27 09:48 AM

Thanks a lot.... really really very very much

regards
sudhir

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