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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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It’s and Bit’s I hitch hiked on thoughts admire Holding taught to my desire Through the it’s and bit’s of doubt Holding fast the tail of scout. Took me quickly through the shadows Speeding screaming through the narrows Dumped me into darks abyss Voiceless in a state of miss Bounced me wall to wall in echo Jumping distance like a gecko Much to fast for me to pin I did not know where to begin. I turned upon my pillow soft Gave a little silent cough Set the dream to play again A slower speed of now and then. But dreams are funny in their make They live and die what e’er they wake. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Very nice A touch dark for you, But you wake from it Where some just continue to live it In bits Gloom |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I hitch hiked on thoughts admire Holding taught to my desire Through the it’s and bit’s of doubt Holding fast the tail of scout. ================================ Bounced me wall to wall in echo Jumping distance like a gecko Much to fast for me to pin I did not know where to begin. ================================ I hitch hiked on thoughts admire Its lines like that one that make me smile at your dreamers wile. How cool can one line's intention be? When it comes from your pen of waaaay cool, the sky is the limit and even then there is still room for Randy to fly high and make us sigh. Dream on sweet Sybabes ... we are the grateful beneficiaries of your rhyme scheme dreams.     |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, Thank you for the read and comment, but I think there is hope for all. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You have taken a dream and gave it wings Created Randy and other things. WWRS |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Enjoyed the fact that you turned to see if yet the dream would churn upon a cough and slight awake ~ though lo, it trembled, then in shake, It hid once more it's view from you... a sight now hid within the blue... ~*~ Smiling, Sy...thank you for the lovely inspire... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I hitch hiked on thoughts admire .... what a great start to a lovely poem... regards, sudhir |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sy, I have often slightly awakened from a dream only to try to quickly get back into it.. But just like magic, *poof* it's gone forever. Great moring read Sy...more tea? ~Morning hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Seymour, ahh yes, what a wild ride of twists and turns our dreams can take us on. Enjoyed this read!! Cinnamon toast with your tea? hugs to you dear sir. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Good morning sweet, have a happy. Sudhir, Thank you my friend. Nancy, Good morning dear, tea's fine. Chris, Cinnamon toast is fine, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I knew this one was special as soon as I read the first line. *S* And then Took me quickly through the shadows Speeding screaming through the narrows Dumped me into darks abyss Voiceless in a state of miss What a wonderful description! *S* Isn't it the pits that when you wake from a wonderful dream, you can't get back to it... but you can fall into the same nightmare over and over again? *G* I like this very much, Seymour! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern What you say is true, thank you dear. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Seymour, I'm just blessed that I can hang on to some of my dreams and remember them and get to write them down here! (big hugggssssss) I just wish I could get the whole manuscript, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Set the dream to play again A slower speed of now and then. Those lines are so good, like everything that you write Sy~ It is always a pleasure to read you. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, I never thought I'd see gecko rhyme in a poem....that's impressive!!! Nice going, Sy  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer Impressing you has made my day. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting the way you fit a gecko into this ...James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
James, Thank you for the read and reply. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
SY: I loved this had me at every verse you did this one sings, my friend dream sweet xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-27-2003 06:27 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Thank you so much for the read and sweet reply. |
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