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Stranded on a Tangent
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Stranded on a Tangent |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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I’m stranded on a tangent, turned a timeline, turned a torment; like my core went on without me, left me doubting what the door meant when it said to step inside it- ride the tide as it divided me from where my life was going, all the while never knowing, that my dreams were slowly spilling while my cup was overflowing. [This message has been edited by Kevin (04-22-2003 01:22 AM).] |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I really like the way you wrote this. It has a hip hop sound to it, too, ya know? |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I voted |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ride the tide as it divided me from where my life was going, ******************************** we want that tide to bring you surfing back to Pips more often  (A Q for you: typo? were or we're for we are?) |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
ty ms  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nice read and well written |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great write! good beat! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
The mter reminded me of Poe.Good write. paladin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 came back to voteHave a great ride Kevin! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kevin: left me doubting what the door meant amazing write - short and with a punch good luck xxoo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
love the word play an inner rhymes... well done poet sir!! Lets see if we cant get this one in while there is still time You're the best I've ever felt ... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Kevin, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, it always hurts to stand on that tangent but then, you always have to wonder about the river that water can just spill into and imagine where the dreams can flow then, into that deep vast ocean where so many promises wander about! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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