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Open Poetry #26

A memento for Eloise

Chris-
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since 2003-06-09

Posts 52

0 posted 2003-06-10 06:05 PM

a man
alone in his thoughts
where did the time go
he asked heaven as he dropped
he didn't have to glance at the sky
he didn't have to look back and wave goodbye
but eloise wouldn't let him go
she would just sit and cry
what's the matter eloise
why do you lie
I can't lift my head until i know you won't fly
but the junkie without a prayer
couldn't promise he wouldn't die
but he did say goodbye
Eloise I'm sorry
I'll find you again
just wait for the wind
and you can float with me until the end
the End of what she screamed
and that was the end of him

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-06-10 06:19 PM

well written and thought,,,

Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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2 posted 2003-06-11 03:41 AM

good, kinda sad

Lynda
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since 2003-04-26

Posts 52
Vic, Australia

3 posted 2003-06-11 05:12 AM

Chris
I look forward to finding out more about Eloise...& your poems...
regards Lynda

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