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Death of my inner child
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Death of my inner child |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia 
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If I beat you senseless with my harsh words would you remember to act grown up? I strike in rage and still you stand smiling at me The winter came and you died I shed no tears as I viewed the casket Standing there momentarily confused as I saw my dreams looking back at me with sightless eyes I want to cry but I'm a man so I bottle it put on my smile new suit and walk into life empty [This message has been edited by Brad Majors (06-10-2003 02:30 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very interesting write/read,,, Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
An excellent piece Brad, and these lines are stood out to me more than any actually because I think we all have felt this at one time or another... I strike in rage and still you stand smiling at me |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Interesting... If I beat you senseless.....would you remember to act grown up..... Love what that really says...great job! Susan |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awww, Brad, this makes me sad. Maybe your inner child was just taking a little nap? What I would be without my inner child....well....I was once..last year at this time...and I was lost, just lost without her. She needed rest, that's all. She is back now and I will not allow her any harm anymore. Be well my friend, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Brad, I believe your inner child is alive and well...and is helping you write from time to time... Lots of stuff here... Nicely written.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
inside the inner child, is the fragile grownup.... nice poem |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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Lynda Member
since 2003-04-26
Posts 52Vic, Australia |
Brad Ain't it nice to know the inner child is always there. regards Lynda |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well written Brad, though sad. But I know that feeling. I felt like I lost so much of my inner child and innocense when I lost both my father and a marriage within the same year. But that inner child is still there Brad..that is what is allowing you to write your feelings so well. hugs M |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Damn! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I want to cry but I'm a man so I bottle it put on my smile new suit and walk into life empty No, no! You are allowed to feel. Don't do this to yourself. Let go... I loved this piece. It gave me a real sense of how men feel about emotionally letting go. Patricia |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Brad, No you are mistaken with the ending there. Bottling up feelings and being unwilling to cry doesn't make you a man, it makes you weak. Common misconception of what being strong is. The real strength lies in facing your fears as well as your emotions deep within and letting them flow, both good and bad. It's so easy to lock away and hide from them. I should know, I used to do the same thing. But if you continue doing so you are just going to wind up dead and unfeeling inside. And what's the point of existing then? Mike Go ahead and cry. I do, and I'm not ashamed to say so. And when you are done, go embrace all your other emotions to the hilt, and see if that inner child doesn't return. See if you don't feel alive again  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
That's what I say also...go ahead and cry...I know that some people think you are weak if you cry...but what do they know...they don't have to live with the pain...James |
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JingleBear Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 76Pennsylvania, USA |
I'd be lying if I didn't say this was great! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Brad~ Good ... really good~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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gyiel marlok Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 145OHIO |
great piece |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
powerful stuff. |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
this is a very powerful and heartfelt write. it speaks from experience and shows. i could cry when reading this one as it stirs up emotions. hugs from june xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brad - this is the best piece I have read in a long time . . . as for your inner child . . . I belive I have seen him flitting about here and there . . . This is amazing xxoo |
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