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[In]Visible
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since 2003-06-04
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0 posted 2003-06-08 02:53 PM


This is what she said:
'I never felt any love from you'
This is what I said:
*nothing*

Silent.
Struck quite dumb.
Agonisingly numb.
Those words ripped right through me like a buzzsaw blade.

Everything I felt for her:
negated, ignored, gone.
Tried to figure
where communications went wrong
No neon signs to salvation.
I really don't know what was,
and is,
real anymore.
Someone show me the way,
an open door.

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2003-06-08 03:18 PM


Yes, this is tough .... when it seems never enough!
Well written! I feel your pain.
Love, Margherita

[In]Visible
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2 posted 2003-06-08 03:36 PM


Thanks Marg, can I call you Marg?

Sorry, suddenly I imagine you with an improbably tall blue hairdo...

¦¬D

KoKo
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow
3 posted 2003-06-09 02:17 AM


Aaaaaaww !!! I liked this; painful, but I liked it

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

GG
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since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
4 posted 2003-06-09 02:20 AM


It seems the doors are never marked that well... wish I had some neon signs telling me what to do, too. But I guess thats why I need to learn to follow the road signs.. just gotta watch for spray paint covered ones
Fist time I've seen you here... Welcome to the Blue Pages!!!
Excellent post

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
5 posted 2003-06-09 04:35 AM


yes, I understand what you write in this one...good expression
Black Swan
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since 2003-02-05
Posts 165
on the moon
6 posted 2003-06-09 04:44 AM


I just want to say,I've been there,thanks for sharing this,it really hurts (to put it simply lol)you'll feel better soon, just keep writing!
~Talia

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2003-06-09 03:18 PM



Honest

strong

left me feeling your words...

Very good!

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