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More to Life... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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More to Life… Get set, get ready, go, conquer…whole… and then complacent in your soul did you look beyond the hole? We strive, we set, we toe the mark, we drive, arrive, have set the spark… we flame, we name, and play this Game, and then we falter in fall of fame no hall for us, our dreams now scattered and worn and raveled and still we patter about the matter of time to space then fit and script the need to race and more to life is on our lips at our touch through fingertips as it lays upon our hips and slows our race in daily trips… but our mind is sole provide of guess and go and even tide it’s the space that holds the place that sets our grace an even pace for in our mind we suit the time that runs the rhyme and clothes our chime… and still and though I scream then sigh I hold to gold within my eye and think of when the day I die I see time long and see the bye… I see the briars and their thorns I see the born and forlorn then still I see the mystery of what once was, and what will be… and hold I will to what once was no matter now, or what love does to keep me sane or in sane, rule, sometimes in common, sense is fool… this come to grip, this Life, this Trip… this more, I find, and more to life, I keep in mind. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I loved it. Very thought provoking. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"and hold I will to what once was no matter now, or what love does to keep me sane or in sane, rule, sometimes in common, sense is fool… this come to grip, this Life, this Trip… this more, I find, and more to life, I keep in mind." There is so much here Karilea.. So many layers and so much truth.. Into my library so I may ponder this more when I'm awake.  ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
life is a definite puzzle and the longer I live the more persistent are the questions...nice go, 4th to last stanza could been another closure..just an opinion |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved the way you did this one Karilea, did it feel as good as it read? There is definitely more to life and I for one intend to live it. This was incredibly good m'friend. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Oh yes, there is so much more! This is just beautiful and very much enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
but? y'never know when you're making a memory. I was thinking, there are people who have made a difference in my life that will never know it. A couple of them were complete strangers with whom I've never even exchanged words. The thing is, we don't know the plan...and I like the idea of that. And I'll get outta here before I end up caught in one of my fruit loop thoughts.  Hugs. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, So much wonderful sense and nosense, You weave a fine rug.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I always know where to come for inspiration when I'm feeling blah |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
Sigh.... I wish I could write like that!!! Neeraja |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
I call a time out...... okay, wow that was a lot to swallow. Good job. Thanks for posting it.  (¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...what a wonderful trip with your thoughts...clever and charming! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karilea~ Now this...I REALLY love. Love the rhythm, the rhyme, and the word play of this. A wonderful write. Big hugs,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
A clever read. Joyce |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Goodness, love it when you rhyme! The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
wow...so much internal rhyming I almost sang this one...loved it, Karilea hugs M |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
really a nice write,,,,,, It's the quality of the complement that i feel, not the quanity. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You made your heart dance to your thoughts ..... the rhythm is quite amazing. Love it. Love you, Margherita |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
and hold I will to what once was no matter now, or what love does to keep me sane or in sane, rule, sometimes in common, sense is fool… this come to grip, this Life, this Trip… this more, I find, and more to life, I keep in mind. Very well put our Sunshine!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Ethel...we try our best... You heard the rhythm, Margherita...that's good, because there certainly was meant to have a skip that wouldn't stop...  Glenn, thank you for the bump! Maureen, I'm glad! That makes my day! Auguste...when I can, I'm glad to share the smiles...thank you for sharing yours! Thank you Joyce! Vicky...THIS...seeing you smile...makes me smile. Thank you dear! Martie...hugs you! Kellie...time outs are great! Kind of ran away with you, huh? Every now and then we should write breathless poetry...being carried away is fun! Neeraja, who says you can't?  Dixie, that's a very nice compliment. Thank you! Sy, I get my nonsensical sense from You!  Karen, I'll share fruitloops with you anyday, as long as I can have the milk come coldest from the 'frig! Patricia, may your cup always be filled with more! Yes, Mysteria, my friend, it absolutely felt as good to write as it did to read now weeks later, thanks to Glenn...it felt Very Good! Ecrivan, you're right..it could have had a quicker ending, but I sort of got carried away... Enchantress, you know I love layering...thanks for noticing! Julie, thanks for seeing the thoughts within. Hugs all! |
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