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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-06-07 02:07 AM



the moon ripples
   with my secrets

sliding
glistening silver
into a foaming
               night sky

I am alone

             remembering
the young Earth

hear my tale speak
of it's beginning

       a slap at the immense silence

       a hum of the world's voice
scattering in abyss

I turn over in the
cold
ink
of wisdom

and ripple the moon

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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-06-07 02:16 AM


Bri:

what an old soul you are . . .

I can Hear? this sweet silence

amazing insight and God you know
I saw this - you made me see this entire poem in my head
brilliant
xxoo

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2 posted 2003-06-07 02:21 AM


nice
serenity blaze
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3 posted 2003-06-07 02:23 AM


I want so much for this to be a series...

you are nature's voice and the spiritual metaphor astounds me.

I want to hear the world through your words.




Ishmael
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4 posted 2003-06-07 08:00 AM


This is exceptional work. Enjoyed the read of it.


Ish

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5 posted 2003-06-07 01:13 PM


a slap at the immense silence

       a hum of the world's voice
scattering in abyss

*
stunning! I'm keeping this one Brian
wish I had penned this

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2003-06-08 12:21 PM


I love this SO much, I just had to ask--
can I surf yer blowhole?


littlewing
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7 posted 2003-06-09 07:40 PM


this needs to breathe . . .  
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