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Flutterwings
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since 2001-07-10

Posts 288
Maine

0 posted 2003-06-06 08:56 PM

The Music Within

I fear if I don't risk the game today
I will be left in solemn reverie
If in the morningI forget to play
The many songs locked in my memory.

Time and its wonder never seems to last
Wreaking dark shadows where I once saw light
I know I can't relive what has now past,
But I will try to win the timeless fight.

I need to hear the rhythm of my heart
Express the hungry passion in my soul
And give it wings and freedom to impart
The stories that as yet remain untold.

I don't want to depart this world today
Encumbered with an unsung melody.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
By ~ Madeleine Armstrong
aka ~ Maggie ((~.~))

This is my very first attempt at a sonnet...
I contacted Marge Tindal and she referred me to
Denise who was a great help.
Thanks! You gals are awesome!

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-06-06 09:01 PM

i liked it,, very good!!!!

Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2003-06-06 09:02 PM

Maggie it is so great to see you posting and you couldn't have two more talented ladies help you out. What a lovely job you did on this sonnet, it's beautiful.

I know I can't relive what has now past,
But I will try to win the timeless fight.

A great message to all in these lines and full of hope.

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (06-06-2003 09:04 PM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-06-07 03:34 AM

awesome job! wonderful!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2003-06-08 01:45 PM

MaggieMyDearLady~
And all this because I emailed you my first and probably last Sonnet !!!

You amaze me dear poetess~
And ..... as Denise noted, it didn't take much at all .... the Sonnet was darned near perfect when she got it !

Thanks for trusting me to help~
I love ya' gal~

AND for those of you reading these replies -
GO READ SOME BEAUTIFUL POETRY AT MAGGIE'S WEB SITE !!!
http://www.geocities.com/flutterwings.geo/Poetryindex.html
Nothing lovelier !!!

Bless you, my friend~
This Sonnet is certainly a beauty !!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2003-06-08 02:50 PM

I don't want to depart this world today
Encumbered with an unsung melody

Beautiful!
Love, Margherita

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

6 posted 2003-06-08 02:58 PM

Oh...so good. I know this feeling well. I have been away from my writing for so long. Now that I have found it again, I fear it will depart. So, I remind myself every day to sing it praises.

Lovely sonnet!

Patricia

Flutterwings
Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 288
Maine

7 posted 2003-06-08 06:01 PM

Thank you dear poet friends for your generous comments on my sonnet. I've been away from PIP too long..... I'm going to have to start reading and commenting on all your wonderful works of art.
Love and peace, Maggie ((~.~))

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