Open Poetry #26 |
Poetic Aversion to Logical Navigation |
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She wove the night Into her eyes Letting only the pinpricks Of stars shine on me And I found the web of clouds A trap for my own gaze So that in gauze skewed fashion I didn’t notice the contrast Of light on black. It turns. Across the zenith And constellations found their way To familiar as I grew accustomed To peering hard in stumble Across the plains of day. Always darker than I remembered Love should be I clung to maps trying to avoid the holes Where gravity turned on itself And let nothing of me escape Yet always found the stars In her. Tell me Spock How logical is this act of caring When you know the distance Will never be traversed? Time Denied |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron You cannot travel some paths with a map and logic...especially when you are driving in a heart. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It is the contrast I liked most of all~ You write so nice, and never fail to hit a nerve. Good one Cpat~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Captain...saving this for a later reread.. Love the way you use words. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I wish I didn't understand this one quite so well. ....but it's beautifully said.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I am not sure you will find any logic in love. Maps are of know use in your navigation, only patience and time will assist you in navigating the course. Even then you may expect a bumpy ride. A wonderful verse you have written. Patricia |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm a lousy co-pilot. And Martie's reply is absolutely perfect. You pilot with your heart, and logic lies somewhere else. (LOL, not saying anything else, I may become cosmic.) |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"How logical is this act of caring..." Logic is not involved. An intriguing poem. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks you answered your own question. You dont need Spock to tell you anything about logic or love...all you need do is read your own starlit words..this one is poetic heaven Im still imagining your voice ... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
She wove the night Into her eyes Letting only the pinpricks Of stars shine on me Ron, another masterpiece. i'd love to pick out all my fave lines in this, but i think i'll end up recreating the whole poem. into my library again. much love, gemma xxxxxxxxx |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautiful... Susan |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Love defies logic, doesn't it? *S* I liked this very much, Cap'n... your title hooked me... your poem made me glad it did. *S* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Layers and layers and layers... do it again. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A look from both sides nicely written. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
It isn't logical, isn't meant to be, friend. But then, there is always the chance there might be a way to bridge the distance, yes? Just takes certainty and a lot of guts. Cor |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sorry you just reminded me of my favourite spock kirk exchange. Spock talks about the irrationilty of a certain female character and kirk looks at him and says..Spock...vulcan is the species of..rational females..or something along those lines..well i thought it was funny. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Logic and wisdom are two very overrated qualities, believe me when I say this, as beauty itself spawns the natural necessities! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a deep write, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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