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Patricia
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0 posted 2003-06-06 01:59 PM


In Mind’s Garden

On a retreat to her mind’s garden she go
Where the summer flowers spring from snow,
Where tall grasses act as a parent shield
Of seedling’s beauty not yet be revealed.

With mind of thought she labor and toil
In effort to coax a bloom from the soil.
With fervor she weed and prune her young.
With patient await her verses be sprung.

She faithfully travel the garden alone,
Nourishing the seeds which she had sown.
Cultivating blossoms by the sun and moon
‘Til offspring sing sweet a metered tune.

With a mindful thought to her final line,
A mature flower she pluck from the vine.


[This message has been edited by Patricia (06-06-2003 02:20 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-06-06 02:03 PM



Very interesting write, Patricia.  You talk in "simple speak", in singular vernacular, and make me think of an uneducated speaker who knows only to bring beauty through her garden...I like this very much.

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-06-06 02:22 PM


Patricia, this is soooo incredibly poetic!
I enjoy your writing very much! It always speaks to me!

Lovin' hugs,
Linda

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2003-06-06 03:41 PM


Nice...James
QjQ
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4 posted 2003-06-06 03:43 PM


your words bring out a nice vision,,,,

Poetry is a vision that portrays ones impressions.QjQ

jwesley
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5 posted 2003-06-06 03:45 PM


Basically same as Sunshine, but I pictured
someone young, maybe a kid...

cool piece..

jwesley

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6 posted 2003-06-07 04:44 AM


really cool write
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7 posted 2003-06-07 06:10 AM


very nicely done..I like the singular...
has an old fashioned feel to it.

*s
M

Rick
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8 posted 2003-06-07 10:05 AM


Patricia, really enjoyed this poem, tending the seeds of the mind to maturity, then to offer them as verse to we who enjoy the aroma and its beauty.
Thanks for sharing, tack care my friend.

Sincerely
Rick

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9 posted 2003-06-07 10:25 AM


She faithfully travel the garden alone,
Nourishing the seeds which she had sown.
Cultivating blossoms by the sun and moon
‘Til offspring sing sweet a metered tune.

With a mindful thought to her final line,
A mature flower she pluck from the vine.


Patricia, this is beautiful. It felt as if I was skipping along in a beautiful garden as I read it.

Hugs  
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-07-2003 10:25 AM).]

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10 posted 2003-06-07 01:27 PM


love this stroll through the mind's garden
and the reality garden of life, where things really do spring up, earth's bounty blooming then coming to maturity
to re-seed and begin anew

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