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Wedding Vows |
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Adonis Cross Junior Member
since 2003-04-07
Posts 46Miami, FL, USA |
This moment sees my passion at its height. That statement, come tomorrow, won't be true-- My love, with every morning's new-born light, Will reach another plane you never knew 'Til every love a lover gave before Can hardly seem authentic anymore. When we first kissed, not many years ago, I knew without a doubt that I would fall In love--and on this day, I firmly know My infinite affection will not pall-- And with it is an everlasting gloom I'll hide as I congratulate the groom. [This message has been edited by Adonis Cross (04-21-2003 02:00 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely thought! I Thee Wed Our strides are in rhythm as we glide along. Blooms of petals open to make room. You are the bride, I am the groom. All in the room gasp and view the awesome love I share with you. >>QjQ<< |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very good, Adonis...a love of yours, flowing through another to another's eyes... what a picture... what a gloom... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have found myself falling in love with married women but they never fall in love with me...nothing ever comes of it...you have to keep slapping yourself into reality.....find your own...leave her alone...they wrote a song about this...James |
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one_thought Junior Member
since 2003-04-03
Posts 23just a state of mind |
Bravo Nice write |
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Adonis Cross Junior Member
since 2003-04-07
Posts 46Miami, FL, USA |
Just so everyone knows, this is not an autobiographical poem, nor do I intend for it to become one. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Ouch!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
The rhythm is good and so is the flow but why write this style? I simply don't know Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Adonis Cross Junior Member
since 2003-04-07
Posts 46Miami, FL, USA |
The style...do you mean the rhyme scheme, ababcc? It's a very durable form. "Venus and Adonis", by Shakespeare, among other poems, are written in it. If you mean the ironic nature of the poem iself, then my answer is, "because I like it."  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
always a friend never a groom?  very nicely written! hugs, g "If you suppress laughter, it goes down and spreads out your hips."- Steve Allen |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! Awwwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautifulm sweet friend, I'm so happy for you and I know with your truthful and promising heart you will always be faithful to your love, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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