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summer days |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light 
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~*~ cattails and daisies blow in the breeze butterflies flit about while birds sing in trees frogs leap on lily pads honeybees buzz around dragonflies go whizzing by busy ants march along a small brook is babbling a wide river roars fluffy clouds go sailing by a mighty eagle soars sunny rays on summer days soak up early dew honeysuckle fills the air and mourning doves coo the willow is weeping while whippoorwills sing by the waterfalls in the forest the fairy bells ring ~*~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I pictured the whole scene and it was beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, Julie! Thank you for saying so! It pleases me that you could envisage the images I was endeavoring to portray!  Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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Drummerboy06 Junior Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 46Indiana |
hmmmm, well first of all, i think you may need to consider seperating this into stanzas. i got half way through it and then i realized that it contained rhyme, so i had to go back and re-read it. another thing you might want to do is include punctuation. in a few spots, it is a bit iffy on the image you are trying to give cuz it just runs on and on; there are no real pauses. the rhyme isnt exactly perfect either. it changes quite often, you might want to fix this so it reads a little easier and smoother. other than that, i like it. it seems to describe the ideal summer day, nice. thanks for sharing. Half the world is composed of people who have something to say and can't, and the other half who have nothing to say and keep on saying it. - Robert F |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
Earth Angel...I must say I loved this one. It's imagery and other uses of literary elements just melted my heart in ways of beauty and peace. It was a beautiful, I enjoyed reading it, greatly. Pe@ce. ~*~Kirah~*~ "Life is not measured by the moments we take,but by the moments that take our breaths away." -Author Unkown. [This message has been edited by WindSong (06-04-2003 06:49 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
drummer boy ~ I wanted it to be simple and without punctuation to appear more naive and child-like. That is why I didn't capitalize the title. I actually did want it to "go on and on" as I wanted the images to run together as a child would perceive them. I do however, appreciate the suggestions and you taking the time to read my poem and comment. I am pleased that you feel that I portrayed the ideal summer day! Thank you! May your summer be a glorious one! Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
*Kirah* ~ That was such a lovely and warm-hearted reply. You have a lovely spirit, dear Song of the Wind! Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I must drop this playing around and go out and revel in summer. Thank you for the lovely reminder. Love, Joyce |
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Drummerboy06 Junior Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 46Indiana |
oh, ok. got ya. i made a mistake in my previous post, i meant to say 'rhythm,' not 'rhyme' when i said "the rhyme isnt exactly perfect either." and there is one spot where the rhyme is not there: line 6/8. all the other lines rhyme, but not these two. is there a specific reason for this? Half the world is composed of people who have something to say and can't, and the other half who have nothing to say and keep on saying it. - Robert F |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Breathing in summer with you. That's sooo lovely! Love, Margherita  |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Ahhh what a nice Summer day outdoors you brought us with this Linda. No doubt about it, Summer is here. I can tell, by the humming of my air conditioner... lol Linda, as in all of your poetry, to me, this one was, “just perfect.” Thanks Much, Richy |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Joyce ~ Come to Ontario and revel with me this summer! --and bring your inner child!--She can play with mine! The four of us will have a joyful time! Love & hugs, Linda |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Margherita ~ Come join Joyce and our inner children! We'll revel, and picnic, and party, and swim, and dance, and sing... Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Richy ~ You knew just what to say to put the smile on my face! You are a gem! Loveya! Linda |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Linda, I love your summer day...very beautiful. And I could see your images perfectly in my mind. Love your writing!  Patricia |
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chinesestone Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 76China |
a wonderfull summmer |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Patricia ~ You are so kind and thoughtful! I appreciate your appreciation of my writing! May your summer be full of sun and fun! Warm hugs, Linda |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
chinesestone ~ Hi, there! Welcome to Passions! Great to have you as a new member of our poetic family! May all your summers be "wonderful"! Warm welcoming hugs, Earth Angel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beautiful time, a beautiful write |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Linda: Summer is a busy time out there, isn't it? What a beautiful description you have written, and it reminds us to stop and pay attention. I especially love thinking about the fairy bells! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
passing shadows ~ ---& a "beautiful" reply! Huggums, Linda P.S. Do you ever sleep, Dear Dixie? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Kahlil ~ Me too! Fairy bells add to the magic of summer! Luvs 'n hugs, EA |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
vandana ~ Thank you! It always pleases me that you drop by! Warm hugs, Linda |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
cattails and daisies blow in the breeze butterflies flit about while birds sing in trees maybe it will soon, rain upon rain upon more rain.........volumes full up northeast here, in NJ, seeing the sun finally today beautiful words of summer that you've written |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
inkedgoddess ~ In the meantime I hope you don't get inundated by the rain and swept away by the torrential downpours! Sunny hugs to help dry up the rain! EA |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, oh my gosh, this is so beautiful! (kiss on cheek) Oh my gosh, this reminded me so much of my grandparents house in southeastern Missouri near Cape Giradeau; every July we come out there and it is so breathtakingly beautiful: the fireflies at night, the daffodils and tiger lilies growing in he fields, and it truly makes me wonder if there truly are faeries all around!  (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, you truly are our fairy godmother, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Linda, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Noah, your reply was so beautiful that it could stand alone as an enchanting poem! I am so happy that you have such wonderful memories! I enjoyed that glimpse into your special summer visits with your grandparents! Love ya bunches, Dear Friend! Linda |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Linda - you are one happy lady writing this. It just dances with summer. H'mmm, gives me a thought, would a dance in summer do? BC |
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