»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #26
»
Insomniatic Gallery
| Open Poetry #26 |
|
Insomniatic Gallery |
|
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
2AM and dust from wheels turning too fast on graveled ruts once called road play games with headlights that are supposed to illuminate but instead reflect back into bloodshot eyes that would like to close but it is too early yet to deny the dreams too late still to go back. Soft The cloud of grime Coating all it touches With pieces of other times That grit against skin When a finger slides To wipe away The ghosts behind burned retina images From staring too long Into the sun If I make it to 3 Perhaps the sleep will come Without the painted Monet’s Of you and I changing into Van Gogh’s nightmare dream But for now… It is 2:10… And I still see you Are not here. |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Cpat Hair - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow. I'm keeping this and will read it again...at 2AM. yep, I'll be there.  |
||
|
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
but it is too early yet to deny the dreams too late still to go back. ..I know this feeling, too well. I end up watching the minutes drag most of the night. M |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I could take lessons from one such as you in line breaks... where double entendre speaks clearly. Excellent write... |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...you've painted me sad...now, how about finding the color of glad? In the night that happens sometimes, wonder if it is just warped reality, or if day has a way of wiping clean the slate.  |
||
SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"But for now… It is 2:10… And I still see you Are not here." know this well... I just love the way you write...  |
||
|
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Soft The cloud of grime Coating all it touches With pieces of other times That grit against skin" A soft cloud of grime that leaves grit against the skin....I like the conflict of that. Excellent my friend! Susan C. |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When a finger slides To wipe away The ghosts behind burned retina images From staring too long Into the sun If I make it to 3 Perhaps the sleep will come Without the painted Monet’s Of you and I changing into Van Gogh’s nightmare dream But for now… It is 2:10… And I still see you Are not here. ======================== my oh mothy my...just look at what youve done here with imagery, theme, metaphor, personification and emote...not to mention impact of that emote..tis poetic mastery like this that keeps the moths coming back time and time again  excellent write poet sir  Im still imagining your voice ... |
||
|
bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Very good Cpat A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah...damn...that's it...exactly it  |
||
|
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, my... why is it that a night flies by when we're deep into dreams that make us smile... but that 2-4 am lasts a century when to even think of such dreams is to laugh... or cry? *S* I know my next round with sleeplessness is right around the corner... I'll read this again and know that you know. *S* Excellent! |
||
|
Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
You speak it well. I understand these long nights. Joyce |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Excellent write, Even I the dreamer get lost along the way. |
||
|
Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'but it is too early yet to deny the dreams too late still to go back.' Yep. How long the night can be... |
||
|
whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
The worst thing about being over tired is knowing you cant get to sleep. Very well written and expressed. Julie "Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. " |
||
|
garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
2AM and dust from wheels turning too fast on graveled ruts once called road play games with headlights that are supposed to illuminate but instead reflect back into bloodshot eyes that would like to close but it is too early yet to deny the dreams too late still to go back. Goodness, Capt Ron, I wish I could write like that!!  Hugs Ethel |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hey, is it 2 AM yet? NO? Well, is this close enough? HELLO? ARE YOU AWAKE? LOL. Goodnite, Ron. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (06-03-2003 01:32 AM).] |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
