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Simply Waiting |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon 
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You can see how the sky sends the truth through the sunlight echoes in the night It hits your eyes a smile to signify that you heard it and you need it You saw me there and you waved to me I blew a kiss and you caught it and you said... It might be a while and I pretended I was okay |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Talia~ Oh how I felt this one... "and I pretended I was okay" I've been the 'pretender' more times than I care to admit. You've expressed it well. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (06-02-2003 02:39 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
for some reason, this one hurts... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...I seem to spend half of my life in waiting...James |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Yes, there is a lot of waiting in life. But maybe we have to learn to be content with what we have before we can be blessed with what we desire... “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
and you said... It might be a while and I pretended I was okay says it all... the pretending can be long and hard at times... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Nice expression of your sadness, Talia. Maybe you should put this one to music.... |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon |
Kahlil! funny you mentioned putting this to music, its actually a song! I'd never posted my song lyrics(the words seemed less intense because there was music to back it up) until this one... thanks! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
~Deep sigh~ Ouch. This literally pains my heart. Writing it down. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Black Swan Such emotional pull to this...the end caught me in a sigh. Well done! |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Talia, I know exactly what you mean about putting out words w/o the music that you're used to hearing with the music. But for someone else who doesn't know that, the words become a special gift on their own. I'm glad it's a song, it cried out to be! Send us some more!! ~K~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Now this - I loved. jwesley |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh |
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