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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia 
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"Sleep " Clock it ticks a deathly sound Night with darkenss all around I sit inside my vacant mind Passing thoughts of other time Sleep it does evade me now Never do I feel allowed To close my eyes in silence fair Instead my eyes in frozen stare Tiredness creeps upon my lone My life inside my holy stone To close my mind is what I wish To get to sleep with not a glitch Awake within a fresh new morn Without the feeling of withdrawn No help, no pill, no things to cure The lack of sleep the nights allure So if in dark you are awake Think of me and light it take Dream of wonderful things to share Awake in morn without a care "Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. " [This message has been edited by whiskey (06-01-2003 08:57 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write!! enjoyed!! QjQ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Julie, I usually go to bed around 2-3 in the morning and wake up in the late morning because I have a hatred of the darkness from my boyhood when I had nightmares all the time and had seizures and remember many sirens flashing from abulances! (sad sigh) But every time I do go to sleep, I think of my dream girl I long to meet and it makes me dream sweet dreams, yay, this is lovely, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Julie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
very good write.  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Julie, I have many sleepless nights. If it is not my own worry and stress, then it is my little one who, just like me as a child, never wants to sleep. She is very active. Sometimes I pray for rest and it helps. I can relate to your verse very well. And you expressed superbly. Patricia |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Julie....shhhhhh....listen to this... tick tock tick tock 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, okay, now backwards 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1,... Rock a by baby...in the tree top... am I helping???? Nicely done, hope you sleep well.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
AAWWW, isn't that a sweet reply that Barry made? Singing "Rock a by Baby". This is a good poem, Julie. I really liked this ending..... So if in dark you are awake Think of me and light it take Dream of wonderful things to share Awake in morn without a care Hugs  Ethel |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
If you ever find out just exactly how to do that then I'll take 100 bottles of those sleeping methods....I know I know, no pills but try and bottle it anyway if you find the solution....Have a good one Eric The best teachers have the biggest ears |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
ZZZZzzzzzzZZZZZzzzzzz... SNNnnnooorre...!!!! Huh?! Oh Sorry Julie... that lullaby Barry was singing made me nod off for forty winks... Ahhh (yawn)... I’m much better now (stretch)... How ‘bout you? Did it lull you to sleep? Oh darn! Hey, I know? Read one of my poems, that’ll knock you out, right quick, and in a hurry! yuk yuk Sorry... ??? Have you tried drinking a glass of warm milk? Yeah, I know, who likes warm milk? Well, except for a baby, of course... Hey, how is the baby doing? Well, actually, if you put some Nestle’s Quick in it... it aint so bad... I’m back on the warm milk, again... Have you tried breathing into a paper sack? Oh wait... I think that’s for hiccups... How about drinking a glass of water, backwards? Wait... hiccups again? Hey... you don’t have the hiccups by chance? No? OH! Just checking... cause if you did... I’d be the guy to call... Well Julie, I hope you get some rest tonight... Oh, and hey... if for some reason, you still can’t sleep... and, also get the hiccups... Try drinking some warm milk, backwards... ! Yeah... Oh, and don’t forget the Nestles... Hey, where is my Nestles? ... now I can’t sleep... Dang it! I’m outta milk again... Sheeeesh! Oh... I almost forgot... Great poem Julie! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...great write |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
indeed, you have captured this perfectly. enjoyed |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Well done |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I to have such a hard time sleeping at night. Very nice write. Susan C. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely penned and much enjoyed Julie. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Great images! I do not sleep much, and probably less than I should. Sometimes I feel like the Steve McQueen character in "The Great Escape" where he is sitting in his cell bouncing a baseball against the wall; I sit inside my skull and bounce ideas off the inside of my head. Maybe tonight w'll sleep!?!? *smile* |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
in dreams, i will come to you, to take you with me, to slumber the whole night through. soft light will surround you in dreams, lightly flowing water of streams. Come into my world of repose, be 'the dreamer', with me goldenrose. you will dream again soon, under the velvety sky, stars and moon. Great write, thank you...rose. |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
nice write enjoyed very much hoping to read more of your work my mind is like a dream sometimes confusing |
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