Open Poetry #26 |
Diamonds are Forever |
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For months I'd waited, wild anticipation in my head, The concert tickets lying on the nightstand near my bed. His music always filled my head and overtook my mind Reminding me of youthful days now left so far behind. Now here I was, face shining brightly, in row C-14, The concert hall filled with more bodies than I'd ever seen! The tickets had sold out in minutes many months ago As folks from every walk of life had paid to see his show. So there we were - the old, the young, the fogeys and the hip, A manifest as strange as Noah gathered for his ship. His timeless songs and gravel voice had brought us all on board And we were set to cruise the seas of memories explored. At once the lights grew dim. I heard the band strike up a beat. A zillion hands exploded as we all jumped to out feet! He stood there, microphone in hand, acknowledging our cheers Then poured out words which had become our anthems through the years. I am - I said To no one there And no one heard at all Not even the chair The air was now electric as our voices sang along. It seemed the whole crowd knew the words to every single song! His voice - our voices - all together, shattering the night, Hands moving, bodies swaying, faces beaming with delight. and the radio played like a carnival tune as we lay in our bed in the other room when we gave it away for the sake of a dream in a penny arcade if you know what I mean With fine strokes of a master's hand, a tapestry was drawn Of names and faces, times and places all too quickly gone. I felt the long hair on my neck, the sandals on my feet. My body felt rejuvenated more with every beat. Love on the rocks Ain't no surprise Pour me a drink And I'll tell you some lies Got nothing to lose So you just sing the blues All the time His voice was belting out the tunes, the band was cooking now. The rafters were still holding up the roof - don't ask me how! One hit after another, million sellers in their day Made problems in our real lives grow small and fade away. It used to be so natural To talk about forever But 'used to be's' don't count anymore They just lay on the floor 'Til we sweep them away I must confess that it was hard to judge which song was best But there was one I'd hoped to hear much stronger than the rest. Each time a new song started I held breath, expectantly, With hopes to hear my favorite one but it was not to be. At last the night was over. He bowed deeply to applause And left the stage. Of course nobody left the hall because We all knew well that he'd come back to give us some encore So, as tradition calls for, we kept screaming for one more. The lights went out - the hall went black, applause and cheering died. The only light five thousand candles swaying side to side. We all stood there in total silence...who knows for how long? Waiting for his re-appearance and one final song. At back of stage one spotlight then came on and brightly shone Its light to silhouette the figure at the microphone. His head was bowed, his arms stretched wide - it was incredulous! The outline of the figure looked like Jesus on the cross!!! The crowd recovered from its shock. I heard the oohs and ahs And then the clapping rose up to a thunderous applause! We screamed! We clapped! We whistled! We gave out a giant yell While waiting for his voice to sing those words we knew so well. Hot August night And the leaves hanging down And the grass on the ground Smelling sweet Move up the road To the outside of town And the sound of that good Gospel beat Sits a ragged tent Where there ain't no trees And that gospel group Telling you and me.......... The concert hall was gone. I stood out in a field somewhere Where one huge canvas tent had quickly sprung up from nowhere. I saw the fire and brimstone man shake fists while raising cain And we all screamed out with delight as he reached his refrain... It's Love, Love Brother Love's Traveling Salvation Show! Pack up the babies Grab the old ladies Everyone goes Everyone knows Brother Love's show!!! He was the preacher...we the flock. He had us 'neath his spell As he ran back and forth across the stage while raising hell. His sermon was OUR sermon - words of glory were our own. His message was to tell us that we'd never be alone. Take my hand in yours Walk with me this day In my heart I know I will never stray Halle, halle, halle, halle, Halle, halle, halle Then, once again, the last refrain And we screamed like we were insane! It's Love, Love, Brother Love's Traveling Salvation Show! Pack up the babies Grab the old ladies Everyone goes Everyone knows Brother Love's show. The hall then turned to black. When lights came on our man was gone, The emptiness of stage reminding us that life goes on But every face that left there had a warm and glowing smile And there were twinkles in our eyes that lasted quite a while. He'll never know the difference he made in me, I guess. For him it was another show to give - no more, no less But he gave me a memory I know will never fade And I will always love the man and music that he played. I've had my goods and bads of life - I've had my ups and downs. I've had things which created smiles and ones that deepened frowns But every time I need a lift when troubles get me low I bring back thoughts of Brother Love and his salvation show. |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
I like the interspersion of the lines. Good write! (please go see my latest poem Untitled I'd love the criticism of a poet like you. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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I always did compare a great concert to epiphany-- seems you know what I mean. and yes, (Neil gets to me too--still! Don't tell my kids tho, they will lose what little respect they have for me.) But? It's about the emotion conveyed, and he DOES that, as do you, m'friend! Welcome to the world of burnt thumbs from holding lighters lit too long... |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Oh Mike, As always you transported me into your words. I was there with you sceaming and singing. Well done my wonderful poet friend. It is good to read you again. Marilyn. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I was there with you in this write as soon as you blazed across this field of blue with I am I said. My thumb is also sore from holding the candle. Wonderful! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yeah....singing along my 'deer wonderful to get to read you again, I've missed your style! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Like Bill Murray says in "What About Bob?", "There's two kinds of people in this world, those who like Neil Diamond and those who don't!" I too admire him very much! (big hugggssssssss) Thnough I have never seen him in concert, I have seen my share of concerts and just this January, I felt my heart beating so much after seeing Shakira in concert, she has so deeply influenced me too, the way when she sang "Whenever, Wherever", hopped on the ladder way above the audience and sang "And remember, whenever, wherver, we're meant to be together!" then the mongoose bit the snakes neck in symbolizing an end to hatred and peace for all! (sigh) It brings tears to my eyes thinking of it every day now to know of such a spirit of grace in music that I dream of seeing again! (sigh) I too share this feeling with you of how the music can deeply affect our lives, I've grown up listening to matchbox twenty and Counting Crows a lot too and I hold tem dear to my heart because they can relate to how you feel so much and the tears I've felt before, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
A great write. Very well crafted. I worked as a roadie briefly in the mid 60's for a forgettable band. He was one of the acts for whom we opened. I got to see him backstage once as he got his mind prepared to face the crowd. I remember that he withdrew farther and farther into himself until he had a look on his face that I have only otherwise seen on deeply entranced Buddhist monks. It was like he had pulled his soul out and wore it for all to see. I was pretty jaded back then but he impressed me. Thank you for sharing this and for triggering those memories. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I must confess that it was hard to judge which song was best But there was one I'd hoped to hear much stronger than the rest. Each time a new song started I held breath, expectantly, With hopes to hear my favorite one but it was not to be. At last the night was over. He bowed deeply to applause And left the stage. Of course nobody left the hall because We all knew well that he'd come back to give us some encore So, as tradition calls for, we kept screaming for one more. Micheal, I love Neil Diamond's songs. Thank you so much for taking us with you to the concert. Hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (06-01-2003 01:59 AM).] |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
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Hi Mike, Wow what an amazing write! Yeah Neil’s one of a kind. And he does have that kind of mesmerizing “preacher like” song style. I bet he put on, one He!! of a show!!! An outstanding tribute Mike! Another Neil Fan |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
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I went to a Neil Diamond concert back in like 1986 or so...went with my father. I remember Longfellow Serenade, Coming to America, Forever in Blue Jeans, Sweet Caroline, If You Know What I Mean, Hello Again, September Morn, What A Beautiful Noise...etc. Never thought of him being "preacher-like" though...maybe a child sees it differently? I guess he always reminded me of my mother. [This message has been edited by passing shadows (06-01-2003 05:03 AM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Anyone ever tell you that you can sure spin a fantastic tale? You and I have at least one thing in common I absolutely love Neil Diamond. He is truly an American institution is he not? Fantastic Mike, a keeper in your section of the wall |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Wow, I was there too...your words transported me there so I was able to hear and see this fabulous concert. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Well, since I didn't have a candle near me (and I am lazy because I danced the night away last night, LOL)I flicked my bic in tribute to you. I, too, was there with you. Thank God the voices melted into one...because, well, I can't sing a lick, but voices in unison sound like angels from heaven. You are a treat to read. Patricia |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
What a wonderful tribute to Neil Diamond.I think one of his most inspitational songs was titled "Be".It is like a matra to inter peace. paladin |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You brought back the magic I felt when seeing him for the first time a few years ago in Wichita. The night was magical, HE is magical..and he will be my Diamond, Forever... Thank you for bringing your experience here, Balladeer...he is truly a uniquely gifted artist.... may his song never waver. |
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apoetdreams Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 52NJ, USA |
This brought me back to childhood! I used to love him and I was certainly the odd girl out in the mid-seventies!!! Wonderful interpretation of the concert. Crafty poem!!! Make your words as sweet as honey, someday you may have to eat them. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
It's a small world, full of coincidences that give me goosebumps. I have his 'All Time Greatest Hits CD playing as I was reading your fantastic tribute to a singer I just adore. Bravo Michael, this was fabulous! Hugs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I love and have always loved the way your poems read...they go so quickly, one continues fluid movement from one line to another that they simply transport the reader from their den to whatever tale you're telling at the time. This one is no exception dear friend. Incrediable write |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California |
Baladeer...you are amazing! This poem, the way you work the reader..like Neal, you took me there, and I swear I could hear him singing. Thank you for this! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer Somehow I couldn't picture you there, I know I wasn't there. But as always your write is excellent. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
As I finished reading this amazing poem, I realized my mouth was dry, it was open the whole time -as I was transfixed to the screen. Unbelievable! Your talent never ceases to amaze, and you lived up to your reputation as a great story teller and poet with this wondeful piece. Thank you, dear poet, for this pleasure Liz |
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Balladeer
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My thanks to you all for such wonderful replies. Why does it not surprise me that there are so many Neil Diamond fans here? This poem is true...that's just the way it happened and I still get chills thinking about it. For anyone who has not seen him in person, if you ever get the chance...do it!! He is an amazing show person.. Thank you again! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
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yeah, I remember him in his black diamond-studded suit...an awesome display! I got chills myself. Never heard my father sing so loud before! It really was an amazing show! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
If only I'd known, I could have worn my "Diamond Girl" tshirt while I was in Florida. *G* I gave you my confession regarding the number of his concerts I've attended... and while I could acknowledge your (as always *G*) flawless rhyme and rhythm, I'll add a greater compliment... Reading this was being there again. *S* Wonderful! *S* |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
'Deer...you gave me goosebumps with this one. I felt as if I was right there beside you. Thanks for taking me to the concert. "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Thanks for showing this. Juju -Juju |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
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Beautiful poem from the pen of a master poet. Checked out the music on Youtube, can see why you are a fan. Enjoyed! |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you, Juju and Jennifer. That one sight of him standing with his arms outstretched with the light behind him is a scene I will never forget. I'm glad you both enjoyed it |
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