Open Poetry #26 |
What Lurks Within |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
A rill of blood upon my lips no mem'ry of my sin, a tingle in my fingertips frees, that which lurks within In shadowed night and hallowed hall at dark or in the day what lurks within, holds me in thrall while other souls must pay By claw and tooth to rend and tear what dwells within is freed in those dark times I am not there though I, on darkness feed No soul to grieve this senseless lust no strength to cease or die I'm driven by the need of must while in the dark I cry The dreams of dark now take control for dreams of lust and greed free that within, to steal my soul and I can only bleed What lurks within grows great in pow'r for I am lost e'ermore So lost to self within this hour in blood pact from before For willingly I held the door allowed this thing inside and now I feel its pow'r and more I've nowhere left to hide Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That rill of blood, m'dear... is flowing in a stream of life now... and increasing in size along with your poetry... Keth...you remain on the grow... don't stop now! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You had me on the edge of my seat er chair. Always a great write from you Lynne Thank you. Maree |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lynne, this did have an eerie feeling to it, but I liked it. It was scary, but a good scary. LOL Hugs Ethel |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ This is wonderfully dark and haunting~ I miss ya' gal~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is very dark. And all I can seem to say is whoa!!!! Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
No soul to grieve this senseless lust no strength to cease or die I'm driven by the need of must while in the dark I cry Awesome Keth !!! hugs, Chris |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a very haunting write |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Beautiful; dark; chest-tightening. Oh, how I love form poetry...well done. Keep 'em coming. CG |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your pen just keeps getting more powerful. *S* This is excellent, lady... even if it wakes what lurks within me. *S* |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"No soul to grieve this senseless lust no strength to cease or die I'm driven by the need of must while in the dark I cry" seriously fantastic |
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Dreamless Decay Junior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 13MO |
Hmm...what can one say other than magnificent "Looking over your shoulder fleeing from The Reaper...Look closer seeing only your own reflection in a puddle of rain." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I'm driven by the need of must while in the dark I cry and when you write Dark...it penetrates one's thoughts. hugss M |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - a great write, and you are a great writer my dear... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"By claw and tooth to rend and tear what dwells within is freed in those dark times I am not there though I, on darkness feed" ouch, Kethry, that's a rough way to set yourelf loose excellent dark write! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow, gonna make sure lights are on tonight at my house before heading down in dark halls...great write Kethry... jwesley |
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