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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-05-29 07:41 PM

Silent shuddering shivers
Her memory crossed his mind
Thinking of her again
Blue aching grew deeper

Time, a wall,
Growing brick by brick
With each passing day

All he wanted
Was to be
On the other side.

ben_pelling
Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 59
Isle of Wight UK.

1 posted 2003-05-29 07:43 PM

This is a very nice write. I enjoyed it very much.

Hugs Ben.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-05-29 07:58 PM

Hummmmm....dear Lady, they are all beautiful,
but I don't know enough about poetry to
figure it out.

Thanks for giving me something else to think about. LOL

Hugs to you

Ethel

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

3 posted 2003-05-29 08:01 PM

well "k" you have done it again!! will we see a #4?

gMt

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-05-30 04:21 AM

good stuff

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2003-06-17 09:15 PM

Is that where the greener grass is..or
perhaps the silence of a mind who only hears
oneself?

Another good one KJ...

topsyturveychick
Member

since 2003-01-19

Posts 57
Bris,QLD,Aus

6 posted 2003-06-17 11:58 PM

Hey, I'm not really sure what ur talking about. Is it possible that u could explain the...is it...motives...or inspiration behind this poem. I'm new to all this stuff so plz forgive me if I sound immature.

I asked God how much he loved me...
He said this much...
And streched out his arms and Died.

**Sunshine**

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

7 posted 2003-06-19 08:10 PM

Sunshine...
Short lines and a heavy message....perhaps in a daydream, her memory has returned, but the brick wall grows higher and his chances grow slimmer, even though his desire seems simple, there probably is complex reason for their seperation...sorry I always project further into the scene when I read poems.an enjoyable read, thanks for sharing...ice

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