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GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

0 posted 2003-05-29 04:31 PM

I’ll just wait to blink
Until I can inhale
My lungs have left me fragile…
My heart has left me helpless.

Energy is missing
Like the smiles in my head.
I’m lost inside your dream…
It’s like I’m living while I’m dead.

Its not so hard
To sit alone, and stare
Waiting, for a breath of air.
Waiting for the sun
To come and pick me up.

I’ll just wait…
Until I can inhale.
And if I die…again…
It won’t be so hard,
To catch the wind
And fill my lungs
With sultry oxygen.

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-05-29 04:55 PM

Sad yet beautiful words. Loved the poem.

Cold hands means a warm heart

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2003-05-29 05:08 PM

A very sad write..However, a presentation of feelings that make the reader wonder.

carol
Senior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

3 posted 2003-05-29 08:13 PM

GG,such a very sad poem it says a lot

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-05-30 04:19 AM

ouch!

El_Campeador
Senior Member

since 2003-01-29

Posts 761
Ohio, USA

5 posted 2003-05-30 08:47 AM

"Whoever wants to save his life will lose it, but whoever loses his life for my sake will find it."

You know who said that... Keep on dying, and live on

~El Campeador

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

6 posted 2003-05-30 09:19 AM

Loner,
thank you. I'm glad you found the beauty in it

Ethome,
its good to wonder, sometimes. Fun to make people think. Thank you

Dixie,
exactly!

thank you.

El Campeador,
Thats EXACTLY what I was thinking, when I wrote this. Thank you for understanding

..and fr replying. God bless you.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2003-05-30 09:24 AM

"Energy is missing
Like the smiles in my head.
I’m lost inside your dream…
It’s like I’m living while I’m dead."

I LOVED THIS VERSE!!! Excellent work!

Susan C.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

8 posted 2003-05-30 10:32 AM

Susan,
I always love knowing what lines people enjoy most... Thank you! Glad you loved it so much.. I'm honored!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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