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Goodbye (Duet With Vandana)
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Goodbye (Duet With Vandana) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Goodbye By: Noah Eaton/Vandana 4/13/03 You're leaving now, and when morning comes, I'll be alone And you would be gone You left a red envelope on my pillow You attached a stamp on it, with your prism tears Read it late one Thursday morning I can trace your tears, splattered over your cursive Where'd you come from, where will I go? How will I look back, at your silhouette tomorrow? How am I supposed to know That time has come to say goodbye Where did we go wrong? And why are you leaving? I didn't want to say goodbye to you Thought this love was so strong Will i look back at those times That we spent together When the nights brought morning light Carved our initials on the sycamore tree Outside in the front lawn Smelled the lilacs in the spring, the apple pies in autumn I swear I can still see the outlines, of snow angels, we made, even in August As far as I'm concerned, your memory won't be forgotten But I won't be sleeping the same anymore I suppose all magic is never perfect But in my mind you were, the closest to empyrean Now I don't feel that innocent anymore For having to feel heartbroken I know you want another To spent time together I'll stay alive Until you come back to me And i won't forget you At the time Of you gone forever Knowing when the seasons change in time And your memory surely bring me back, to the track of yesterday I've got blood on my hands Where I attempted to stop, this hemorrhage, with this tourniquet Where my love lied bleeding Was I skating on thin ice Or walking on the wire? I believe home is where the heart is But I can't find my way home Don't feel bad for me, I'll find my way And I wish you the best For someone to give you all you deserve Your happiness is all I wish for Until then... ... ... ... ...goodbye... "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-13-2003 06:18 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A farewell beyond compare...Truly lovely-- made me almost cry with the sweet ache of it and the vivid memories of what once was...Beautifully written duet. Warm huggums to each of you! Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
What a sweet melancholy pervades this piece ... I just have to wipe my tears away ... so lovely! Your duet is tender and loving, as are you! Love, Margherita |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - this write is excellent with Vandana. You write well together... BC |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Well done Noah and Vandana...enjoyed.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
A beautiful duet that brought tears to my eyes...Well done, indeed. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
hey,noah,thank you so much for writing a duet with you!!!!!!i really enjoy writing with you!!!!!!!!  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Vandana and Noah, Well, I am impressed. As all the others my heart was deeply touched. I enjoyed the way it is written.. liked the questioning.... plus capturing that good bye... thank you both for this. enjoyed. Hugs Pat my goodness... ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (04-13-2003 08:47 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful duet Noah and Vandana!! Very much enjoyed...a keeper for my library. ~Smiles and hugs to you both~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bravo you two!! Very nicely done! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
You 2 write together very well. I totally enjoyed it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Compelling...I could feel some of my sad moments within these words...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This captured the heart and the spirit of goodbye sadness. It was universally recognizable. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Vndana and Noah, I don't know how I missed this the first time around. I'm glad I didn't this time, though. This is a really good poem, with lots of feeling written in it. Ya'll did very good. Hugs, Ethel |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
an achingly beautiful sad goodbye BRAVO for the two of you duet nicely! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - this is excellent, the words are so intertwined that I can't tell who wrote what sentence. Vandana, an excellent write with Noah... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Until then"...seems like there should be more to this story...this writing is fantastic...James |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Now I don't feel that innocent anymore For having to feel heartbroken" it does take some innocense away, doesn't it? wow, great duet you two [This message has been edited by SEA (06-03-2003 06:29 PM).] |
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DozenRoses4UV Junior Member
since 2003-06-03
Posts 16 |
WOW this is truly great. You and Vandana work very well together. I hope you both do more together. DozenRoses4UV |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I don't know how I missed this.. but I sure am glad someone popped it back up! A beautiful duet Vandana and Noah! Thank you both so much for this beauty. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fantastic...for sure...James |
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