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Your Shore-Reflecting Eyes
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Your Shore-Reflecting Eyes |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I’m thinking of running to the ocean; Any chance I could get you to come with me? I’m really wishing this sound I’m hearing Was your voice... So make it be-- Explain to me what you notice When the undercurrents challenge the surface. I’m wondering how your eyes look near the sea; Would you trust me when I speak of such splendor? I’m completely gripped by the notion Of your face composed of the shore... So indulge me-- Tell me what you know About the way the light reflects under the waves. I’m dying to know what you’re thinking; Would you fill me in on all entailed therein? I’m suddenly captured by the hint Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil... So follow me-- I’ll have to show you what I’ve learned From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides. -kh 12/02 just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! love the ending! speaks so loudly, but so softly powerful...I would follow |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I’m wondering how your eyes look near the sea; Would you trust me when I speak of such splendor? I’m completely gripped by the notion Of your face composed of the shore... So indulge me-- Tell me what you know About the way the light reflects under the waves. I’m dying to know what you’re thinking; Would you fill me in on all entailed therein? I’m suddenly captured by the hint Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil... So follow me-- I’ll have to show you what I’ve learned From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides. ================================= Ahhhh...I do so love the things the blue inspires in your pen ... these analogies and personifications of the ocean are pure poetry... Splendor? oh yes...you write the blue waved reverie so splendidly.  hmmm....now ya got me wondering what color our eyes will be by Lake Shore Drive  (me thinks mine will still be moth brown..but they will be smiling)  Another very cool write poetess K ... keep them coming...ya know this moth's ocean thirst is never quenched. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So follow me-- I’ll have to show you what I’ve learned From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides great ending lines..and a very good write.. now if you can move the ocean a bit closer to KS so us poor midwesterners don't have to run so far..lol |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
well, will ya look at what I found. Some body with a really good eye for photography took this...  HINT HINT  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and lets not forget my mothy faves....   (so I am biased... sue me )  |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
A pleasure to read, enjoyed. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
ps: thanks for your reply...glad you enjoyed it... J: thanks J...I do appreciate your compliments...I'm thinkin' my head's not gonna fit through the door...SHADDUP...Lake Shore Drive? now yer teasin' and makin' me more impatient than I already was and about that ocean thirst....Cap Ron: trust me, if there was a way to move the ocean here, I WOULD HAVE DONE IT A LONG TIME AGO...thanks for the read...glad you enjoyed! J (again and again): now I'm going to have to pay you for advertising fees...thanks a LOT...cute Tim: thank you so much...glad you liked it... sp  just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kris~ Again..it's great to see you around these parts again.  This is an absolutely gorgeous write...I love it. Waiting for more... Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I’m suddenly captured by the hint Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil... So follow me-- I’ll have to show you what I’ve learned From a sunrise accompanied by restless tides.' Very cool...JM illustrated for you!  Some really great lines in this SP. And yes, the ocean... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I’m suddenly captured by the hint Of your acquaintance with all things tranquil..." Yes, that's the one. The wind is coming in now with the rain and I can smell the ocean. Thank you for sharing these images. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This is incredibly well written. I especially loved the ending. Wonderful poetry! *Krista Knutson* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful write, loved the ending |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
sp, there is only one thing more beautiful than the ocean and that is the ocean reflected in a lover's eyes. This is surely a beauty to keep. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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