Open Poetry #26 |
Shady Rest (rewrite of an old one) |
Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
SHADY REST It’s Sunday at the Shady Rest He gets up early, wears his best Grabs the walker by the wall And shuffles down the yellowed hall Some visitors were due to call His son, the wife, and grandsons too Were coming by, they seldom do They’re busy folks and he knows that But still they’re coming by to chat Why they’d be here in nothing flat He settles on the porch to wait And thinks about the quirk of fate That led him to be staying here Away from folks that he holds dear The ones he yearned so to be near Two years ago his good wife died Depressed and all torn up inside He now was left to live alone And forced to make it on his own He struggled hard to get a grip But then he fell and broke his hip His son is coming through the gate His youngest grandson too, but wait There’s no sign of his good son’s mate Nor did he see the older lad He wouldn’t be here, never had The old man gave his son a hug While grandson sat down on the rug And watched some old folks sitting there Gazing on with vacant stare They had no guests but didn’t care The boy spies Mrs. Monahan She’s playing checkers with her man She plays all day and doesn’t know He passed on thirty years ago She’s talking to him even so The old man’s son is doing well He’s happy, the old man can tell He talks about his life and laughs He shows the latest photographs An hour passes, maybe two The talking stops as if on cue There’s something now the son must do He says the words that he must say “Hey Dad, come home with us and stay The boys can learn to share a bed” He sees his grandson shake his head He’d rather eat a snake instead The old man says, “I’d better not We better stay with what we’ve got They’re much too big, a bed to share I’d just be getting in your hair And son, I need a lot of care” The son says “Dad, I plan to take You fishing soon down on the lake I’ll buy the beer and bring the bait We’ll have a swell time, just you wait” The old man smiles “Well that sounds great” Then shuffles with them to the gate He blinks a tear and feigns a cough A hug, a wave and then they’re off The old man struggles back inside With lowered head he tries to hide His eyes so no one knows he cried It’s bedtime here at Shady Rest He lays, arms folded on his chest He ponders now and tries to find Some reason for his fate assigned This fate that had been so unkind To take his life and leave his mind |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
... Thank you, Fred. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Fred, I'm sorry fred I missed this post It's really one that you can boast It tells a story of common ilk And sais it plain and smooth as silk. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a wonderful piece, Fred ... I really enjoyed this. Your cadence and rhyme flow beautifully throughout, and the storyline brought home the message perfectly. I was planning to call my dad on the weekend, but I think I'll pick up the phone now, after reading this. Thank you for that. Excellent format, and a wonderful read. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok. Now that I can't see the screen through my tears!! You give us all something to think about, Fred. It's nice to see you here. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Another home run, Roy, er, Fred! I've missed your stories, pal. This one ranks high on the list....excellent work, Fred. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Yes! |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nice rewrite, very touching write QjQ |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Sunshine: You’re welcome! Thanks for the smile Sy: Thanks friend for the kind rhyme Kit: I appreciate your words, hope your dad is well PdV: Thanks Sharon, it’s always nice to be here Mike: Glad you were able to “catch” it this time, Sir. Thank you Dixie: Thanks, happy you liked it QJQ: Thanks, it’s old. I just cleaned it up a bit |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is truly how it is... I have a firmly embedded vision of waving good-bye to my grandmother as we'd leave her Shady Rest - She loved visitors so much - And she 'knew' as well... Thanks for your fine words, Fred... |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Thanks Nan, It's always nice to get an apple from the teacher. |
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