Open Poetry #26 |
driven home |
Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
gray concrete vista curved and rising an outstretched weed struggles to overtake the scene in this window that I live inside I leave the lights cold the music low I wear the photo raw and finally toss it in the drawer whose location I hope to forsake erase her from my mind with the usual bludgeoning tools if only I had the strength to abuse them we said goodbye this morning as I whispered a desperate note into her hair, as I held her and then she was gone into the crowd of faces better composed than my own I drove from the terminal away from the lost confessions back to the cold steel and erosion that she had made possible to forget even if it was only for a short while even if for a short while it was all there for the taking [This message has been edited by Drexler_McStyles (04-17-2003 09:40 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
an outstretched weed struggles to overtake the scene in this window that I live inside ********************************* back to basic survival mode |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I could feel every line of this...from the title to the end, it gripped my emotions. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Drexler, this is a very powerful poem. I felt sadness in it. Hugs to you, Ethel |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
As usual, a sharp and honest write.enjoyed the raw "realness" of your write, but I always do. Jason |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love the way you write |
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