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Deaf Eyes |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Deaf Eyes Tick tock timebomb, rotting from the inside out, I'm the one they all blame when their jigsaw life refuses to fit. I am no swan blossomed time of dandelion metamorphic rose, I am never tasted by the moment when the rain runs it's lips across my furrowed brow of youth. And everybody knows that there's no consolation prize for last place. Intangible screams wake with hell sky mornings hanging themselves from teardrop earrings, dangling still heart, pewter by sorrow suckle skin. I believe so much I've stopped hoping, I plead so much knees bleed insane stones. Though there's always light at the end of the dark, I've passed that point long ago that even my scars have scars and eyes are blind echoed of prayers inaudible. But, don't worry, my friend, it's alright, I'll go on heaving a smile and you'll never see the sound that I was dead before I cried. By Melissa Long-Monette |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
that even my scars have scars Now who's reading who's mind? Awesome writing canucklehead |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Honeybee - I share with you your words: Tick tock timebomb, rotting from the inside out, I'm the one they all blame when their jigsaw life refuses to fit. 'I've known the time of tick tock for I've felt the pain inside always gave, but never received and I too am still the one blamed because their jigsaw world refuses to fit. BC |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Could it be there is more than one entity that is thicker than blood, the toothache and scabs themselves can be infected ever so deeply you don't know the limits! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, makes you wonder exactly when you are seeing 20/20, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This is one hard-hitting poem...excellent! I'm going to make it a point to read all your stuff from now on. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wow - poetry on steroids! Imagine that. Good work, thanks for sharing it. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Melissa: even my scars have scars and eyes are blind echoed of prayers inaudible. echo . . . brilliant again - the both of you in my head - no wonder I cant concentrate! amazing write xxoo |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
damn..is all I can say...  sorry not good at this comment thing..I think yall have been in my head! If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Even scars on scars can be healed everything takes time. Great piece Julie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Intangible screams wake with hell sky mornings hanging themselves from teardrop earrings, dangling still heart, pewter by sorrow suckle skin. I believe so much I've stopped hoping, I plead so much knees bleed insane stones. Though there's always light at the end of the dark, I've passed that point long ago that even my scars have scars and eyes are blind echoed of prayers inaudible. =========================== All Hail to our queen of melancholy metaphor.   hanging themselves from teardrop earrings, dangling still heart, pewter by sorrow suckle skin. could that line be any cooler??? love your alliterations and personifications. Your words are power Meliss-girl... pure poetic power. I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your brilliance is shining through this jewel of a poem. (I trust that this is pure poetry and not a reflection of your reality--'cause this is far too heavy a scene for a sweet, little honeybee!) Loving, healing hugs, Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You are an excellent writer and this is an excellent write. I wish you well.  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Though there's always light at the end of the dark, I've passed that point long ago that even my scars have scars and eyes are blind echoed of prayers inaudible. Melissa, this one really touched me. It hurts. Even though I truly hope that it's not written from personal experiences, I kind of feel like it is. If I'm wrong, and it's not, though, it sure did feel real as I was reading it. Either way, Lady, you have got some kind of talent to be able to write this way.  Heart hugs to you from me, Ethel |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
maybe the reason we all have an understanding and feeling for each other... is because we're all inside each other's heads!!! awesome job Honeybee!!! Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well. . .any comment that I would leave wouldn't even begin to do this justice. . . so. . . I will just read it again. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can say I'm not that strong |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Melissa You write with much power and emotion...can feel a strong spirit inside the lovely. |
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