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christian
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since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

0 posted 2003-05-20 01:25 PM

    from autumn to ashes
    ---------------------

    red leaves decorated backdrops in scarlet last august
    and summer sidewalks brimmed autumn,
    when you spread your wings--unrefined angel ..
    to the outskirts of eden
    pulling out of driveways
    onto barren freeways
    with a tank of gasoline and
    streetguides that served as treasure maps,
    vulnerable to the most unorthodox of all influences ..

    and you said you'd be okay
    yeah--you promised you'd be okay ..

    two identities and a year later--you've changed
    yeah--you've changed
    and honesty's failing
    because your apologies are as hollow as
    the beerbottles on carpet floorboards ..
    suspect to your fallacies
    so while you readjust your backbone
    i'll be fading faintly
    in the most ghastly--of all fashions
    only to remind you of bestfriends that always were

    so take your souvenirs, and
    savor the last of my sympathy
    while i salvage the last of you
    and surrender ..
    .. to these tragic endings

    because you've changed,
    yeah--you've changed
    and your excuses are as empty as
    the cigarette packs in your glove compartments,
    i don't care for abridged versions
    so while you fumble for words,
    i'll use these photographs for firewood
    as alternatives
    to your dying candles
    and burn these journals
    because our memories aren't welcome anymore ..

    red leaves decorated backdrops in scarlet last august
    and summer sidewalks brimmed autumn,
    when you spread your wings--unrefined angel
    to the outskirts of eden ..
    so vulnerable
    to the most unorthodox of all influences ..

    and you said you'd be okay
    yeah--you promised you'd be okay ..

    but you've changed--yeah, you've changed.

    ----------------------------------------
    and i dont want the world to see me
    because i don't think that theyd
    understand,
    when everythings meant to be broken
    i just want you to know who i am

    [goo goo dolls]
    ----------------------------------------

[This message has been edited by christian (05-20-2003 01:29 PM).]

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-05-20 01:40 PM

good read and write, has many points to think about

Poetry gives us relief, We give poetry reason.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-05-20 01:46 PM

Christian, where have you been?
Never mind, isn't any of my business,
but I'm glad you're back!

christian
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

3 posted 2003-05-20 01:58 PM

college is has been really high mainten-
ance for me. 18 hours of course work along
with 25 hours of work per week bites you
in the back sometimes.

but semester's over, and i've got the sum-
mer. so here i am. thanks for wondering
though, :smirk:

--chris.

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

4 posted 2003-05-20 02:07 PM

well done piece

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2003-05-20 02:11 PM

outstanding blending of poetry and lyric,
of angst and imagery, of concrete & ethereal visuals & emotive expressions.
Your writing is a superb example of contemporary poetry and song writing.
Nice to see you back...I look forward to reading future inspires.
jm

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-05-20 03:45 PM

red leaves decorated backdrops in scarlet last august
    and summer sidewalks brimmed autumn,
    when you spread your wings--unrefined angel
    to the outskirts of eden ..
    so vulnerable
    to the most unorthodox of all influences ..

    and you said you'd be okay
    yeah--you promised you'd be okay ..

    but you've changed--yeah, you've changed.

Chris, I'm glad that you're back. I've missed you, too. This is such a well-written write. You are a very talented writer, you know. I hope to see more of you around here.

Hugs,
Ethel

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2003-05-20 03:51 PM

Excellent write.
TD

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

8 posted 2003-05-20 04:30 PM

Love it...more than you'll ever know! and btw love "Iris"

I wish I could write like this..I truly do...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2003-05-20 11:46 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Christian, I too can get so overly emotional when I see people change so drastically, me, I probably have changed somewhat and I think we should all moderate somehow but that is not what I mean when some even seem to forget who they are! (sad sigh) I've seen it, from someone who I thought loved me to my older brother! I am so happy you're back, dearest friend, I hope college went great, I just completed my term also, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Christian, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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