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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-05-20 10:19 AM

Un-laced

once a candle’s lit
the wax begins to run
flame to the wick
it can not be undone
it alters composition
the burn fills the air
once a fire has started
it changes what was there
your fire has betrayed me
this I do not understand
sweet moments broken
with the touch of your hand
you shared with another
the secrets held within
telling the melting of my heart
is now your biggest sin
I am not angry
just cut to the bone
I thought you had a tender heart
but it is just a bloody stone

     of all the things about me
     behind all the locks
     I may be just a candle
     but the brightest one in the box

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-05-20 10:23 AM

* of all the things about me
     behind all the locks
     I may be just a candle
     but the brightest one in the box

i was impressed with these lines  very good write!!!

Poetry gives us relief, We give poetry reason.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2003-05-20 10:27 AM

Another wonderfully worded piece Helen. hugs to you for this, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

3 posted 2003-05-20 11:20 AM

nicely written... hugs...

regards,
sudhir

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2003-05-20 12:11 PM

bright. . . yes, you are. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2003-05-20 02:51 PM

Could not have been an easy write but it is an amazing one. thanks for sharing the purge

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

6 posted 2003-05-20 04:26 PM

amazing purge..I'm with Raph..you write your words with such grace..lovely..

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2003-05-20 06:08 PM

enjoyed

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 2003-05-20 09:45 PM

'Tis a wonderful metaphorical analogy, m'friend...

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-05-20 09:58 PM

     of all the things about me
     behind all the locks
     I may be just a candle
     but the brightest one in the box

This is very good writing, Helen.

Hugs,
Ethel

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

10 posted 2003-05-20 10:17 PM

once a candle’s lit
the wax begins to run
flame to the wick
it can not be undone

Beautiful. You never fail to inspire....and the truth of this one simply reverberates.

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