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Please tell me what you think..... |
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Darcy New Member
since 2003-05-18
Posts 7 |
Distant Heart Through the twilight shadows sleeping, Thy voice sings sweetly as the lark, Luring me with the beauty of thy spirit, My heart left joyous by your mark: Oh, love! That gentle beast that tames me, Hath pierced thy name unto mine errant mind, Taketh my soul to lands undiscovered, Where Passion's revelation I doeth find. Oh, Tash! Thou protest thou art nothing special, And the lonesome miles cruelly keep us apart, But the veritable splendour of thy being, Is still cherished by this distant heart... This is the first poem I have ever published on the web and I was kind of wondering what you guys thought of it. Is it any good? I like the style of the classic love poems such as Lovecraft and so I wrote it in that kind of style. I have published it on another poetry website and am hoping it will make Poem of the Week. If you would like to vote for it, here's the url: http://www.lovepoetscafe.net/cgi-bin/search.pl?action=read&keyword=8612577&pword=public |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the familiar theme of long distance love...two people in love but apart...written very well. I enjoyed this. Welcome to Passions!  Do share more, and enjoy all of our writings as well. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! And I can see very well why it got published and achieved that honor, because this truly is a gem with the classical chivalrous romantic spirit shining within! This is a marvelous debut, sweet friend, you are most deserving of these merits, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Darcy, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Darcy, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story ***Shakira*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-18-2003 01:25 PM).] |
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Darcy New Member
since 2003-05-18
Posts 7 |
Thanks guys, you are very kind! Actually, Mistletoe Angel, it hasn't won Poem of the Week yet, the contest hasn't finished! But I'd be honoured and very, very grateful if any of you guys would kindly vote for it. The girl it is written for, Natasha, hasn't seen it yet. And it would be so cool if I could show it to her and then say it had won a contest! She would be thrilled! So, please, PLEASE, vote and make the girl of my dreams very happy.... http://www.lovepoetscafe.net/cgi-bin/search.pl?action=read&keyword=8612577&pword=public |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Welcome to PIP! Natasha is a lucky woman and I voted for you reminds me a little of Shakespeare and Dylan Thomas up there nice entrance good luck xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (05-18-2003 07:40 PM).] |
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teledon Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 51Florida USA |
I like the classic style .. and especially the line "Oh love, that beast that tames me! "keep it simple" |
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Darcy New Member
since 2003-05-18
Posts 7 |
You guys are so kind! You give me inspiration! |
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