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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Midnight strolls sleeplessly wandering toward the end of the pier stepping lightly over weathered slats gathering up the day peaking through cracks where the sea lies calm in peaceful simplicity the moon slanting sideways shines undercover in silver ripples and all is still along the shoreline beneath quiet swells after the sun's gone down a thousand times like before the boardwalk stretches out emptying into the silence nightcapping the view like a necklace of lights beyond the dark ocean crested white~ ~*~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
where I find peace of mind and solace in the void that cannot be filled by another. Aw, Bluesie you do know how to set a mood.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lori..how serene this is...lovely..simply lovely. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
oh yes the ocean so blu always has many thoughts to write!!!  It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...Lovely paint...wish I was there! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Smiling here, as I substituted the spelling of midnight, and still found much truth and beauty in this write. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
PS, I'm keeping this gem.  |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
BluesSerenade, what another wonderful poem! You really took me back to a real favorite place of mine... The Santa Cruz Beach Boardwalk... I especially have fond memories of my youth, driving out to the adjacent Municipal Pier at night... Sometimes to do some fishing... And sometimes to just hang out... I would watch the people on the Giant Dipper as they would slowly get pulled up the first initial peak, and then hear their high pitched shrills as the Roller coaster plummeted down... And I would listen to the Merry Go Round, amidst the breaking waves, and the sound of couples whispering to each other, as they walked by, hand in hand... It was almost like I was waiting for something... Or someone... I can picture myself right now, standing on that pier, looking at all the lights of the waterfront through a light fog, with nothing more then the rolling tide, and my wandering thoughts to keep me... And I can almost smell that salty ocean air right now, as a lone seagull’s shriek, fades away, in the distance... Thanks for bringing back, such a nice feeling BluesSerenade... I really needed that right now, Richy |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, Such a picture you have painted here. I can feel the mist of gentle sprays, hear the laps of waves, you've put us there. The imagery here is fantastic. Enjoyed greatly, Hugs and love, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
The ocean is the source. Thank you for helping me travel there. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It is my pleasure, Larry Dear~ Nancy~ You, are the lovely one, thank you~ QJ~ The blue sea is one in the same. Thank you for your nice reply~ Martie~ It is always so good to read you hear, (here, here, edit, edit ) Thank you for lending your own splash of color to my words~ Ms. Midnite~ Thank you for letting me know this was worth saving! Substitions and all! You're so sweet! Richy~ I'm gearing up for my vacation, and plan on walking to the end of the pier and riding the rollercoaster a few times. I am so happy that I could bring back some memories for you. Your reply...took me back to my youth as well...seems the rides moved faster then! Thank you kindly~ Pat~ Thanks for your nice comments~ I appreciate them more than you know~ The source? How right you are~ That's where it begins and ends for me~ Smiling at you Icebox~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-17-2003 11:02 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It sounds so beautiful there...maybe it is I, who should be visting you. hugssss M |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lori, this is beautiful, sweet friend, this reminds me of the Van Gogh paonting "Moonlight On The Rhine" and how seeing the light bend over the waters on the riviera is mesmerizing! (kiss on cheek) I love this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
The ocean at night...wish I was there. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! what imagery! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Maureeeeeeeeeeeeeeen~ Thank you!I hope it's already a go, let me know. Hugs, girl friend~ Oh Noah~ Well, it's not the Riviera, (in my dreams) But I'm so pleased that it took you there~ Thanks, and hugs~ No comment Duncan~ You left yourself wide open... I wish I were there too, and I thank you~ Right back at you Dixie darlin'~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beautiful -- simply beautiful. I've seen this, and though I don't have the option of taking that walk, I've needed to and sometimes wished I could. Thanks for sharing. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
This is beautiful and very soothing... my only suggestion is to use punctuation though Its brilliant! I love it "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hmmmm...I'm clueless again.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I am pleased that you know of the place, even if it is only in your minds eye. It's always nice to see you here Ed~ Thank you. Wings~ I have made the mistake of putting commas where they don't belong, more than a few times, mind you.... so I left them out all together. But you're right, this would read a little better that way. Glad you enjoyed, and thanks. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Not gonna fill me in huh?  |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
These are lovely images. I have felt this and find myself traveling there as often as possible, if not for real at least in my thoughts. (Sensitive and pensive) Thank you, enjoyed alot. SG |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I was just trying to yank your chain Duncan~ Being my dizzy self! Guess you'd have to be there. *wink* Welcome to the clueless club~ SG~ What a nice reply that is. I will be the first to admit I'm overly sensitive, and truly, there is nothing like the ocean air to clear my head. Thank you so much for reading. |
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aran Junior Member
since 2003-05-18
Posts 34 |
this poem is fantastic. The word "Pastorale" comes to mind. Reminds me of Snowbound. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi aran~ Welcome to Passions, and thanks for stopping by to read. I appreciate your nice comments. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Jerking my chain???? You too Blue? I'm hurt...  But you're blonde, so I'll forgive ya! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're hurt? Come now, I could have pinched ya, but I would be crushed if you never forgave me. I'm telling you for the last time, you had to be there! Thanks for the funnin' Duncan~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Isn't that what I said to begin with???? Could I get a translator in Aisle 12 please?!?  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Watch it Duncan, I am perfectly capable...and furthermore I wasn't the one who said I was clueless...it's just a dumb club, but I hear new members are welcome, come one, come all!! How about I just send you a postcard that says, "wish you were here" Now then, I am going to go finish my book seeing that I'm getting to the good part! It's been a real gas~ |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I loved this one it brought back beautiful serene memories written as if you had seen where I have spent so many nights as always - visually stunning & superb write |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy . . . you do know how to sing me a lullaby . . . God this reminds me sooo much of Kauai where I left half of my heart . . . beautiful singing tweets xxoo |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
So...whacha readin? Ok, I'll be quiet now. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, I love this beautiful picture you painted here. It has almost everything I like in it....... midnight strolls..... the waves and ripples of the water..... the beach...... Just beautiful. Thank you for the wonderful picture in my head. Hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (05-18-2003 08:37 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
dreambuilder~ Perhaps it is the days gone by where our dreams are built...or the way we leave them to reflect upon. Thanks for being so gracious with your compliments. What a coincidence Tweety, I spent 10 years on Maui many moons ago, where a part of me still dwells. There's no escaping from paradise, who would really want to...it was the best kind of lullaby, one I will remember for all my days. If I had known you were there I would have done some serious island hopping. Thanks.I am reading up on how to get a clue! Duncan~ I'm going to write you a poem someday, just because you're such a fun kind of guy. I will be sure to get a translator and send them over to aisle 12 just in case you get lost. Thanks again~ I love the ocean at night, it seems to take on a mystery all it's own. Thank you always Ethel~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Breathless... Bluesy Girl, I do believe this is the purest perfection I have ever read...NO STUFF! Excellent! JUST EXCELLENT. TD |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the moon slanting sideways shines undercover in silver ripples and all is still along the shoreline beneath quiet swells after the sun's gone down a thousand times like before the boardwalk stretches out emptying into the silence nightcapping the view like a necklace of lights beyond the dark ocean crested white~ ======================= oh my....my oh my............ Oh how I miss those silver ripples... how I ache to see the moon light dance on the wave curls... I still dont have the words to define how I felt sitting on the shore at 3 am... the ocean is magic at night. Exquisite write poetess Lori... Im keeping this. (IWIHWT)   I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hey Lori...may the moth ask what ocean are you writing about? I was at Virginia beach, Chesapeake Bay, VA and Nagshead in NC. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
TD~ Your comments blow me away. Coming from you, I don't know what to say. Just know I thank you for your encouraging words, and sharing your kind heart with me. Sincerely~ Hey Janet Marie~ I grew up on the left coast, (California) it was truly my backyard when I was a young girl...then I lived in the Hawaiian islands in my twenties, seems like only yesterday. Today the beach is a 15 minute drive through the canyon, and where I spend my summer days. Meanwhile I'm heading over to the right coast in a week or so, and it is there I wish to reach beyond the crest and take in another view and make it last a lifetime. Hence, my inspiration. You flatter me with your replies. Thank you JM~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-20-2003 12:25 AM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Such a serene picture you have painted Blues.. I wish I was there! Maree |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What a wonderful vision you portray - nicely done... |
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