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Midnight Triolet
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Midnight Triolet |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I shake my head ruefully in the dark, Shadow walking across mid-night, Pausing to sit silent in the park, I shake my head ruefully in the dark, Flowers bloom yet spirit is stark, The sorrow seeps from those of light I shake my head ruefully in the dark, Shadow walking across mid-night. Gloom The Triolet An eight line poem of French origin, probably around the thirteenth century, with a repeating rhyme, repeating line. A,B,a,A,a,b,A,B, (capital letters are repeated lines). [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (04-17-2003 05:38 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've put my hand upon a triolet but it is mercurial and will not [yet] allow me to capture it... they are not easy...although you could probably teach me... so...you keep writing, and I'll keep reading...deal?  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Sunshine, The are very easy to do, just pick a line or two, Maybe a couple of phrases dear to you, Such as The scent of blossoms drift on breeze Blooming with madness of the spring Then rhyme the first line, Into frenzy from body spirits ease, Repeat the first line The scent of blossoms drift on breeze Rhyme the line again My soul escapes to drift through trees Now rhyme the second line My body falls as life takes to wing Now just put the first two lines on The scent of blossoms drift on breeze Blooming with madness of the spring And there you go, a Triolet Gloom |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome Gloom. I will have to try one of these...when I get up the nerve. I love this! Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
No Sleep Have I I sit and watch as time goes by. It's after Three, those drops of rain, Awakened me from dreams, had I. I sit and watch as time goes by. Warring thoughts, bring tears to cry, Fingers tender the wet of pain. I sit and watch as time goes by. It's after Three, those drops of rain, Pounding hard, the sound of time, In holding patterns, dreams shall keep. The tap tap tapping, Poe-like rhyme; Pounding hard, the sound of time. It's after Four, says clock in chime. I've lost more sleep from mind's eye, weep. Pounding hard, the sound of time, In holding patterns, dreams shall keep. The tapping's stopped, the myst now reigns. I sit and watch as time goes by, Inducing sleep, dreams, my domain. The tapping's stopped, the myst now reigns. It's half past Four, no sound on panes. But wakened still, no sleep have I. The tapping's stopped, the myst now reigns I sit and watch as time goes by. M I can't believe I even tried those way back when...glad I saved them though  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
I really love what you wrote... Great poem.. Waiting more Hugssssss Secretlife You Are My End Secret Life... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Sad but beautiful. You are definitely an example of why I like being here in this forum. There is so much to be learned and so many willing to share their knowledge and souls. Thank you! -Patricia |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Thank you! I hope you don't mind, but I have been saving your poetry and your outlines and the explanations of the various forms. They are so helpful. This particular write of yours seeped right into my being and I felt a wave of loneliness and sadness. You certainly as a master at creating ambience and a variety of moods!  EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (04-19-2003 08:01 AM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I do love the triolet - Very nice, PG... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ProfessorGloom~ I like the all of it ... but this line just speaks volumes of inspiration- 'Shadow walking across mid-night.' *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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