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a day and a half with mom
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a day and a half with mom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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just one day after the fact-- I watched my parents in their compact take a turn, the hard way on Highway 23-- traveling at ninety. Barreling down the wrong side of what became an Interstate-- tractor trailors did a split-- while my folks rode center line as we did ninety on the other side leaning on the horn. I learned how to scream that night. I sweat a pool when they finally found the turn that led them to the proper side-- thanking the un-nameable for the scene that I'd been spared. * * * Mom? she brought me to the park and we were stopped there at the light-- a funeral was in process-- I looked sideways and I smiled. She looked innocent and shrugged, but we knew significance. She didn't look at me again but she said, "That could be me." and I said nothing in response. We took my kids down to the park and my mother sketched the water tower over trees, I wished that she'd romanticize-- but she drew it as it was perspective perfectly defined. I thought that it was kind of stark, and I always told her truth. So I said so, and she grinned, and said, "Well that's the way it looks." Then there was the yellow bus that pulled into the parking lot. I heard the whine of children and I saw that it was all "grown-ups"-- gangly and without much grace but joy was written on their face as they raced to reach the swings... Grown children had their way that day. My mother tensed as though alarmed-- my kids were playing on the gym. But I sat there, so transfixed, and asked her, "why don't you draw them?" "You should get the kids," she said. "I think we should go get some lunch..." I realized the gravity but took the time to question why. "You know," I said, "I envy them." "They look happy to my eyes." I felt the cool in humid June, as she slapped me with a look: "Don't you ever, don't you dare-- take for granted what is there.." then she tapped me on the head. So I went to get the kids, but watched the others play. They looked content enough to me. I left there, envying their bliss... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
K this is my favourite, i mean you know I love em all but this..this is mine..mine hugs |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
"You know," I said, "I envy them." "They look happy to my eyes." I felt the cool in humid June, as she slapped me with a look: "Don't you ever, don't you dare-- take for granted what is there.." then she tapped me on the head. So I went to get the kids, but watched the others play. They looked content enough to me. I left there, envying their bliss... Kare, this is precious. I loved all of it, but this part sounds so much like my Mom talking to me. It really does. And when she talks like this, she is so serious. Like Raphey, I like all of your poetry, but as of now, this is my favorite of yours. Thank you for sharing this with us, friend.  Heart hugs, Ethel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing..I know I use that too much when talking about how I feel when it comes to your writing...but it's true... You amaze me lady! Love ya Hugs. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
"You know," I said, "I envy them." "They look happy to my eyes." I felt the cool in humid June, as she slapped me with a look: Karen, this is simply an awesome write. I feel as if I have been there, in that same type of situation.....or...did I put my own daughter in that place? Your writing moves me to extremes in emotion - thankyou. hugs, Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile? Thank you all. One of them "true serenity" things that has more truth than perhaps I need t'know...  I should pay you guys for therapy...or..heh heh, sue ya! (that was a joke yanno) I do try to clarify these days... Hugs all...I am most grateful! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
simply beautiful K - you know - you should listen more often to what you already know: . . . never take for granted for what is there . . . what a beautiful memory and yes also the twist of knowing but not is sometimes desirable - you know - starkness of reality . . . thank you - made me feel good this did I can only hope to live up to such utter grace . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (05-17-2003 12:46 AM).] |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
you don't just look you See.... and yes it looks like... like escape to those aware like animal's freedom free of the pain of intense awareness pure innocent joy but you have a different gift and one that shouldn't be regretted else how would we get to read this exquisite wisdomslice of our existence? you are a diamond K never forget that love |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm always in awe of how you write |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Dixie? you are the only person in the world say I can this to: "GO TO BED!!" laughing you... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-17-2003 02:08 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah and when the perils and joys of life's emotions interact.....great story Celeste! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
lessons learned. . . and yet. . . well, you know what I think. . .I don't even have to tell you. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
All of your writing is well done is this is off to my library |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well my hometown (or thereabouts anyway) friend, you know I always ejoy your stuff but this is one of your better writes all the way around. All the aspects of a terrific piece are here, the opening, the "wanting to see what comes next", the smooth, cascading flow all the way through, and the perfect ending. Mucho applause... jwesley |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
as I said last night and will repeat myself... you are awesome! your writing is awesome! great job! Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Amazing what we learn to see... and thank the poets that bounced this back UP! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow, you wrapped up all the complexities of life and tied it with ribbons and bows..incredible write |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for tolerating still yet another true serenity story... OH. and jwesley--yep, I'd forgotten that this is YOUR old playground. My uncles all have fishing camps in Myrtle Grove, and yep, Mom made that wrong turn heading back to Belle Chasse. She must have driven down the wrong side of the highway for about three miles, and you KNOW...well,  sigh. truly horrifying. Hugs all. Thanks for reading! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Big *HUGS* to you, lady.  No 'tolerating' necessary...you KNOW I love this. "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Goodness, lessons beyond belief written in this one. We must never take anything for granted. You have an exceptional vision! Wonderful write here. Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Very well written. Poignant pain. Thank you for posting it. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) I recall time and time again when my mom has told me the same thing before as I was a boy and always stayed true but was abused and lived through depression, I always believed her and I guess I was too naive to hang onto the notion! (sigh) Then looking through your mothers eyes it hits you like a brick and you appreciate, you value with the love you're offered! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I absolutely love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light awlays shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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