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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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holes in his bucket leaked emotions like dirty linen cleaned on the city streets eagerly watched by big scandalous eyes that will tell stories of how a man cried feeling the slap of time trying to divide the lines from the mesh picking black from black |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, A difficult task, but a good write, enjoyed. |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
It's a good poem, I don't entirely understand it. But maybe that makes it even better. You write well. I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
You write of pain and hardship here my friend. The shame of having nothing but the will to carry on. This is what I have gotten from your gifted writing. If I am not correct...so be it....I still enjoyed it thoroughly. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
An excellent piece of poetry, and a hard one for a man to write. Every word of this poem communicates, adds to the wall of emotion it builds. Here are my favorite lines of all: holes in his bucket leaked emotions like dirty linen cleaned on the city streets eagerly watched by big scandalous eyes that will tell stories of how a man cried feeling the slap of time trying to divide the lines from the mesh picking black from black ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I still cannot believe that English is not your first language!!!  Lovin' hugs, Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SudhirMyFriend~ 'holes in his bucket leaked emotions' Aching imagery within this thought~ Nicely done, sweet poet~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is one of the best that I've seen from you my friend. . . there is so much that you've captured here. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
A very nice write!!!! It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 awesome writing, awesome my friend! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sudhir: you bare your soul here my friend and air your laundry with much pride amazing writing - but it always is . . . xxoo |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Like Sue said, amazing.Like always. Jason |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir Such honesty in poetry touches me.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
An excellent write, Especially of the emotional makeup of man... Very well done...ThisDiamond |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
My dear friends, I did not even dream that this would collect so many responses... but I guess the reader's eye knows more than the writer's thoughts and dreams... Your thoughts and responses are much appreciated... thank you all so very much... Regards Sudhir |
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