Open Poetry #26 |
Mirrors |
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
In reflection one becomes two Losing myself in lock of eyes On which side of the mirror does the real one lie? ____________________________________________________ Struggled with this, love the idea but not my execution, I'm off to bed maybe I'll tinker with it later nite folks [This message has been edited by Aenimal (04-17-2003 12:38 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph: I dont think you need to tinker with this at all: you are seeing two sides of yourself struggling to incorporate them into one (right?) amazing write - as always xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-17-2003 04:02 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I agree with Sue...very perceptive writing |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I wouldn't tinker with this, Raph...perhaps add another hall of mirrors in your thought process, layering poetically where this might be taking you...letting us pick up the pieces where you drop them...now that, I'd be liking...yep... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Do we like the person we see or do we go whoe...James |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon |
I enjoyed this. I wish I could just step thru the mirror,exploring the opposite dimension ~Talia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh I enjoyed this one! Lots of thoughts on this...I like that. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
bump |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue in answer to your query ..SI..but also has a little psychotic element to it I ask strange questions sometimes..ask me some time also the way I look I think all mirrors should be banned in my house anyway Thanks Dixie i try..don't always succeed but try grin Thanks Karilea as mentioned above I had just about enough of mirrors they're evil James I usually go " oh dear god..oh god..what the..oh god.." something along those lines Talia wonder the same thing, i think he's having more fun on his side despite the way he looks dammit Thanks Nancy especially the hugs Once again thanks dream appreciate the support |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
heheheh gotcha . . . and your still wrong |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
hey Aenimal sorry I thought I'd already responded to this mirrors used to bother me self reflection still outweighs a physical image I can walk away from a mirror - not myself It would seem as though we are both very critical of ourselves while forgiving & seeing the beauty in others perhaps because we know ourselves too well in some ways & not enough in others thats my take & as always I enjoy your writing - & look forward to more . . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . . [This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-18-2003 12:18 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I like it just the way it is! Warm hugs, Linda |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue not wrong o0 Dream you got me right, completely nailed it Thanks Linda appreciate it just feel it need a little somethun somethun |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is terrific Raph... and.. I like the way you look Maree. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, I'm really glad that you didn't tinker with this poem. How much more perfect can you get? And......that goes for the inside and the outside of you, too. So, Raphael, I told you about being so hard on your self. We all can see that you are a very special person on the inside, even when you can't see how special you are.... and, just what do you see wrong with the outside of you?? Heart Hugs to you, Raphey Ethel |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
*poke* |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Damn I love this... I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Okay I'm officially an Aenimal junkie now...Add my damn to that list too. You always say the most profound/thought-provoking things in few words, you're the master of this style and you've fast become one of my favourites here at passions. You add an elegance to pain and universal truths. I'm keeping this one too~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Maree Thanks but the Solarize tool does wonders on pics, sweet of you to say though Ethel what's wrong with me on the outside? I'd write you a list but I don't do epics! grin glad you did vandana Sue CURLY block nyuk nyuk nyuk wooobwooobwoooowoo Thanks Koko I appreciate it and love the Chang Tzu quote too Honeybee wow! Very kind words they mean alot to me. Hey wadda ya know we have something in commmon we're both proud canadian brunettes eh! Thanks again from one hoser to another |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . one day I will follow through on that block . . . came back to read - seems I need a mirror myself . . . xxoo |
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